零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by using proper linking words and avoiding redundancy. Also, correct grammar mistakes and keep the answer within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words.

範例: I usually avoid eating snacks because I am health conscious. However, when I go out with my friends, I sometimes eat snacks like rolls and burgers. These occasions are rare, so I try to keep my snacking minimal.

建議: Improve your answer by using clearer sentence structures and linking words to make your points coherent. Avoid repetition and clarify your ideas with specific examples. Also, correct grammar errors and use appropriate vocabulary.

範例: Whether snacks are healthy depends on their ingredients. For instance, snacks made from refined wheat flour can be harmful, while those made from whole grains are healthier and beneficial for our health.

建議: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using past tense consistently and avoiding unclear phrases. Provide specific examples of snacks you liked and explain why. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I was a foodie. My mother used to buy me snacks frequently. My favourite snacks were spicy ones, which I found very tasty.

建議: Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Explain why you prefer certain snacks and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases and be specific about the benefits.

範例: Nowadays, since I go to the gym regularly, I prefer healthy snacks. For example, I often make a burrito bowl, which is nutritious and supports my fitness goals.

× Whenever I visit with my friends somewhere out that time I eat few snacks, for example like rolls and burgers.

✓ Whenever I visit my friends somewhere, I eat a few snacks, for example, rolls and burgers.

The phrase 'visit with my friends' is incorrect; 'visit my friends' is the correct form. Also, 'eat few snacks' should be 'eat a few snacks' to indicate some quantity. The sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary words like 'that time' and 'like' after 'for example'.

× It depends what are you eating.

✓ It depends on what you are eating.

The phrase 'depends what are you eating' is incorrect. The correct form is 'depends on what you are eating' because 'depend' requires the preposition 'on' and the clause should be in statement order, not question order.

× Some snacks are healthy but some snacks are not healthy.

✓ Some snacks are healthy, but some snacks are not.

The sentence is repetitive and can be improved by removing the repeated word 'healthy' in the second clause. Also, a comma before 'but' is necessary to separate the clauses.

× For example snacks contain wheat flour is very harmful for people's health but where whereas snacks made out of wheat or some other grains which is healthy, it is beneficial for individuals health.

✓ For example, snacks containing wheat flour are very harmful to people's health, whereas snacks made from wheat or other grains are healthy and beneficial for individual health.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'snacks contain wheat flour is' is incorrect; it should be 'snacks containing wheat flour are'. 'Where whereas' is redundant; only 'whereas' is needed. 'Made out of' should be 'made from'. 'Which is healthy' should be 'are healthy' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'Individuals health' should be 'individual health'.

× Yes, when I was young, I often eat snacks.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I often ate snacks.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× I am AI was a foodie, that's why I eat a lot of snacks.

✓ I was a foodie, that's why I ate a lot of snacks.

The phrase 'I am AI was a foodie' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'I was a foodie' to match the past tense context. Also, 'eat' should be 'ate' to maintain past tense consistency.

× My mother often buy me snacks at that time.

✓ My mother often bought me snacks at that time.

The sentence refers to past time ('at that time'), so the verb should be in past tense 'bought' instead of present tense 'buy'.

× My favorite snacks is snacks, which is very spicy.

✓ My favorite snack is a snack which is very spicy.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, but the verb 'is' is singular, causing disagreement. Also, 'favorite snacks is snacks' is repetitive and unclear. It should be 'My favorite snack is a snack which is very spicy.'

× Nowadays I am performing gym, that's why I feel like healthy snacks is suitable for me.

✓ Nowadays I am going to the gym, that's why I feel healthy snacks are suitable for me.

The phrase 'performing gym' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'going to the gym'. 'Feel like healthy snacks is suitable' is incorrect; it should be 'feel healthy snacks are suitable' to agree in number and correct verb usage.

× For example, I usually made snacks called burrito bowl.

✓ For example, I usually make snacks called burrito bowls.

The adverb 'usually' indicates habitual action in the present, so the verb should be present tense 'make' instead of past tense 'made'. Also, 'burrito bowl' should be plural if referring to multiple servings.

× It is healthy as well as advantages for my health.

✓ It is healthy and advantageous for my health.

The phrase 'as well as advantages' is incorrect. 'Advantages' is a noun, but here an adjective is needed. 'Advantageous' is the correct adjective to describe something beneficial.