零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening, and these days I prefer fruits like apples, watermelons, or oranges because I am cutting down on sugar as part of my diet.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer linking words and avoiding repetition. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

範例: Yes, I believe snacks can be healthy if we choose them wisely. For instance, opting for fruits, dates, and nuts instead of processed foods helps prevent health problems and satisfies hunger effectively.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid listing too many items without explanation and keep your answer within five sentences.

範例: Yes, when I was young, I often ate various snacks like toasted bread, sugary treats, pastries, and cakes. I believe this habit contributed to my current weight issues, so now I try to eat healthier.

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence and then explaining your reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and use appropriate vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

範例: Nowadays, I prefer snacking on dates and nuts because I am focusing on my health. Since my weight is around 70 kilograms, I need to reduce it to avoid health problems.

× I usually eat snacks during evening.

✓ I usually eat snacks during the evening.

In English, when referring to parts of the day such as morning, afternoon, or evening, the definite article 'the' is used. Therefore, 'during evening' should be corrected to 'during the evening' to be grammatically correct.

× I have to reduce it badly otherwise it will really affect my health.

✓ I have to reduce it badly; otherwise, it will really affect my health.

Although this sentence does not have a direct article error, it requires punctuation correction for clarity. Adding a semicolon before 'otherwise' separates the two independent clauses properly. However, since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes from the provided list, this is a minor note and not a direct grammar problem from the list.

× So I think that really contributed to my current weight so I'm.

✓ So I think that really contributed to my current weight.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'so I'm' which is incomplete and causes a sentence structure error. Removing the incomplete phrase makes the sentence complete and grammatically correct.