零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by using more natural phrasing and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of repeating 'snacks' twice, you can combine ideas and use linking words to make the answer more fluent.

範例: I usually have snacks in the evening with my tea because that's when I start feeling hungry and want something light to eat.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use a wider range of vocabulary.

範例: Yes, I believe snacking can be healthy since I usually choose fresh fruits, dried fruits, and nuts, and I make sure to eat them in moderation to avoid any negative effects on my health.

建議: Your answer contains some unclear phrases and grammatical errors, such as 'Osaka choriz' and 'I used to mince that'. Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar, and provide clearer supporting details with linking words.

範例: Yes, when I was young, I often ate unhealthy snacks like fried foods and processed meats. Although I knew they weren't good for me, I enjoyed the taste, and I still crave them occasionally.

建議: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct minor grammatical mistakes.

範例: I love fried foods, but to stay healthy, I usually snack on fruits and nuts. However, I occasionally treat myself to fried snacks like samosas and kachoris.

× Well, I usually eat snacks in evening time with my tea because it's the time that I feel hungry and I need something to munch on.

✓ Well, I usually eat snacks in the evening time with my tea because it's the time that I feel hungry and I need something to munch on.

The phrase 'in evening time' is missing the definite article 'the'. In English, when referring to specific times of the day, we use 'the' before 'morning', 'afternoon', and 'evening'. Therefore, it should be 'in the evening time'.

× Yes definitely because I do healthy snacking such as fresh fruits and some dry fruit and nuts therefore they're healthy and I eat snacks in portion therefore they are not harmful for my health.

✓ Yes definitely because I do healthy snacking such as fresh fruit and some dried fruit and nuts; therefore, they're healthy and I eat snacks in portions; therefore, they are not harmful to my health.

The word 'fruits' is often uncountable when referring to food in general, so 'fresh fruit' is preferred. Also, 'dry fruit' should be 'dried fruit' as it refers to fruit that has been dried. The phrase 'in portion' should be pluralized to 'in portions' to indicate quantity. Additionally, 'harmful for' should be 'harmful to' as the correct preposition with 'harmful' is 'to'.

× Yes, when I was young I used to eat some junk in my snacks, like some Osaka choriz and some fried food, and it wasn't healthy for me, I knew.

✓ Yes, when I was young I used to eat some junk in my snacks, like some Osaka chorizo and some fried food, and it wasn't healthy for me, I knew.

The word 'choriz' seems to be a misspelling of 'chorizo', which is a noun and should be spelled correctly. This is not a grammar issue but a spelling correction to maintain clarity and correctness.

× But it tastes so good and even now I used to mince that.

✓ But it tastes so good and even now I miss that.

The phrase 'I used to mince that' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'I miss that'. 'Used to' indicates past habitual action and does not fit with 'even now'. Also, 'mince' is a verb meaning to chop finely, which does not fit the context. Therefore, the sentence is corrected to 'I miss that'.

× Well I really do love fried food but I usually avoid that to maintain my health and I usually snack on fruits and nuts and but I occasionally eat fried food such as samosas and kachoris.

✓ Well, I really do love fried food, but I usually avoid it to maintain my health, and I usually snack on fruits and nuts, but I occasionally eat fried food such as samosas and kachoris.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions 'and but' which is incorrect. Also, 'that' should be 'it' when referring to 'fried food'. Commas are added for clarity and to separate clauses properly. The corrected sentence improves readability and grammatical correctness.