零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh, like), correct grammar (use "at night", "after finishing my tasks/studying", "while watching a movie"), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add a brief reason and one specific example to enrich the response.

範例: I usually eat snacks at night after finishing my studies because I like to relax. For example, I often watch a movie and have some popcorn or chips while I unwind.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Begin with a topic sentence (Yes/No and reason). Remove vague phrases and correct grammar ("a totally detrimental" → "totally detrimental", "my mom always says"). Provide a concise specific detail about your digestion problem and mention any occasional exceptions if needed. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don't think it's healthy to eat snacks at night because they upset my digestion and make me feel bloated. My mother often warns me against snacking late, although I sometimes have a small portion when I'm very hungry.

建議: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and specific details. Fix grammar and coherence ("I was obsessed with snacks, especially during school"). Explain what kinds of snacks and give one short anecdote. Avoid unclear words like "detrimental" if you mean "unhealthy" and keep within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I ate a lot of snacks when I was at school. There was a small market near campus that sold cheap, often unhealthy treats, and my friends and I would buy chips and candy after class.

建議: Start with a concise topic sentence naming your favorite snacks. Reduce repetition and correct grammar ("snacks that have a crunchy texture"). Add a brief reason why you like them and give one specific example or brand. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer salty, crunchy snacks, especially potato chips. I like them because of the texture and flavour — for instance, I often choose sea-salt kettle chips when I watch TV.

× I usually eat snacks in the night after uh, finishing my task and my studies.

✓ I usually eat snacks at night after finishing my tasks and my studies.

Use 'at night' not 'in the night' (article/time expression error). Also 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match general meaning; remove unnecessary 'uh' and comma. Keep gerund 'finishing' after 'after'.

× I want to chill a little bit and enjoy while watching movie.

✓ I want to chill a little and enjoy watching a movie.

Sentence lacked an article before 'movie' and had awkward word order. Use 'a movie' and the verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund 'watching'. Remove redundant 'bit' if shortening and place 'enjoy watching a movie' together.

× Uh, I eat most of the time like uh, when I watching the movie and I watch with eating snacks.

✓ I usually eat while I am watching a movie, and I eat snacks while watching.

Use present continuous 'I am watching' for an action occurring at the same time. Avoid 'when I watching' (missing auxiliary). Also rephrase to avoid 'watch with eating snacks'—use 'eat while watching' or 'eat snacks while watching'.

× No, it's not good idea to eat snacks especially at night and it is a totally detrimental to my health because I have some kind of digestion problem and that's why my mom always say don't eat snacks.

✓ No, it's not a good idea to eat snacks, especially at night, and it is totally detrimental to my health because I have a digestive problem, and that's why my mom always says don't eat snacks.

Add article 'a' before 'good idea'. Remove extra 'a' before 'totally detrimental'. Use 'a digestive problem' instead of 'some kind of digestion problem'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my mom always says' not 'say'. Add commas for clarity.

× Uh, it is a so like harmful for you but sometimes.

✓ It is so harmful for you sometimes.

Remove filler words 'a' and 'like'. Place adverb 'sometimes' at the end. Use 'so harmful' as correct adjective phrase.

× Yes I was obsessed with snacks especially my school times and we had that market that sells the old type of snacks and me and my friends always about that detrimental snacks we enjoyed I have amazing.

✓ Yes, I was obsessed with snacks, especially during my school days. There was a market that sold old-fashioned snacks, and my friends and I always enjoyed those snacks.

Use 'during my school days' for time period. 'There was' for past existence (there be). Use past tense 'sold' not 'sells'. Correct pronoun order 'my friends and I'. Replace unclear 'detrimental' with neutral 'those' or 'old-fashioned' depending on meaning. Remove 'I have amazing' which is ungrammatical.

× I usually like potatoes so much and therefore I love chips and I and I also like the snacks that has a crunchy texture and I'm more into salty snacks.

✓ I usually like potatoes a lot, so I love chips, and I also like snacks that have a crunchy texture. I'm more into salty snacks.

Use 'potatoes a lot' instead of 'so much' for natural phrasing. Subject-verb agreement for plural 'snacks that have' not 'has'. Remove repeated 'and I'. Split into two sentences or use commas for clarity.

× I like salt and I just want to eat more salty snacks or products.

✓ I like salty foods and I tend to eat more salty snacks or products.

'I like salt' is unnatural for preference; use 'I like salty foods'. 'Want to eat more' implies intention; use 'tend to eat more' for habitual behavior. Clarify 'products' as 'products' is vague but acceptable; keep for meaning.