零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Исправьте повторяющуюся ошибку в слове (snakes → snacks) и избегайте лишних повторов. Начните с прямого ответа, затем кратко объясните причину и завершите положительным альтернативным вариантом. Старайтесь не использовать одну и ту же фразу дважды («my face skin is sensitive» можно сократить). Используйте связки (because, so, therefore) для логичности и ограничьте ответ 2–4 предложениями.

範例: I rarely eat snacks nowadays because my skin is very sensitive and some snacks cause breakouts. Therefore I avoid crisps, chocolates and ice cream and usually choose fresh fruits instead.

建議: Устраните повторения («made made», «different and added different») и неточности лексики (snakes → snacks). Дайте чёткую, связную причину и приведите конкретный пример альтернативы. Используйте связующие слова (because, therefore, for example) и конкретные описания (artificial colors, preservatives). Не больше 3–4 предложений.

範例: No, I don't think most packaged snacks are healthy because they often contain artificial colors and preservatives. For example, crisps and many chocolate bars are high in salt, sugar and additives, so I prefer fresh fruit instead.

建議: Исправьте опечатки (snakes → snacks) и используйте прошедшее время последовательно. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем объясните причину и добавьте короткое связующее предложение. Можно добавить одну конкретную деталь (какие именно снэки или ситуация в школе) для большей конкретики.

範例: Yes, I ate snacks almost every day as a child because they tasted great and my friends bought them at school. For instance, we often shared crisps and chocolate after lessons.

建議: Сделайте ответ более связным и логичным: начните с общего утверждения о предпочтениях, затем добавьте конкретности и причину для каждого пункта. Избегайте бессмысленных фраз («For me it will. After that I will well.») и противоречивых утверждений (eat rarely vs as a second meal). Используйте связки (but, however, therefore) и ограничьте ответ 2–4 предложениями.

範例: I enjoy chocolate most of all, while I only eat crisps and ice cream occasionally because ice cream is too sweet for me. Chocolate is my go-to snack when I want something satisfying between meals.

× I don't eat snakes nowadays because they are very harmful for my face skin because my face skin is sensitive.

✓ I don't eat snacks nowadays because they are very harmful for my facial skin because my facial skin is sensitive.

The student used 'snakes' instead of 'snacks' (word choice error) and 'face skin' is non-native; use 'facial skin' or simply 'my skin'. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with 'snacks' and use 'my facial skin' or 'my skin'. Note: This maps to singular/plural type only to follow the provided list, but the primary issue is wrong word choice and phrasing.

× That's why I can't eat snakes such as crisps, chocolates and ice creams.

✓ That's why I can't eat snacks such as crisps, chocolate and ice cream.

Use 'snacks' (not 'snakes') and keep uncountable nouns in base form: 'chocolate' and 'ice cream' are usually uncountable when speaking generally. Also 'crisps' is correct in British English. Suggestion: use uncountable forms for general references.

× Instead of them I eat uh, fruits.

✓ Instead of them, I eat fruit.

When talking about fruit in general, English often uses the uncountable noun 'fruit' rather than the plural 'fruits'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: say 'I eat fruit' for general habits.

× They are very nutritious, I like.

✓ They are very nutritious, and I like them.

The original is a comma splice and missing the pronoun 'them'. Connect clauses properly and include the object pronoun. Suggestion: use 'and I like them' or separate into two sentences.

× No it's not healthy because they are made made from chemicals, different and added different colors, different smells.

✓ No, it's not healthy because they are made from chemicals and have added colors and artificial flavors.

Removed duplication 'made made'; 'different and added different colors, different smells' is ungrammatical. Use 'made from' and 'have added colors and artificial flavors'. Suggestion: simplify and use 'artificial flavors' instead of 'smells'. Note: mapped to preposition type to fit list, but main issues are word choice and redundancy.

× It's better to eat fresh fruits instead of snakes like Kiwi chocolate.

✓ It's better to eat fresh fruit instead of snacks like chocolate or kiwi.

Use 'fruit' (uncountable) and 'snacks' not 'snakes'. 'Kiwi chocolate' is unclear; likely meant 'kiwi' or 'chocolate' as examples. Suggestion: list examples clearly as 'chocolate or kiwi'. Mapped to sentence structure error in list.

× When I was a child I ate snakes almost every day because I couldn't resist how delicious they were.

✓ When I was a child I ate snacks almost every day because I couldn't resist how delicious they were.

Main error is 'snakes' -> 'snacks'. Tense 'ate' and 'couldn't' are correct for past. Suggestion: correct the vocabulary and keep past tense verbs.

× Also all my friends bought snacks at school so I usually join them and bought some too.

✓ Also all my friends bought snacks at school, so I usually joined them and bought some too.

Tense inconsistency: 'bought' is past, so 'usually join' should be past 'usually joined'. Add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently when describing past habits.

× I like eating crisps, chocolates and ice cream, but ice cream is for me too sweet.

✓ I like eating crisps, chocolate and ice cream, but ice cream is too sweet for me.

Use 'chocolate' uncountable; word order 'too sweet for me' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: say 'too sweet for me' rather than 'for me too sweet'.

× That's why I eat ice cream rarely but and crisps also rarely.

✓ That's why I rarely eat ice cream, and I also rarely eat crisps.

Place adverb 'rarely' before the verb 'eat'. Remove extraneous 'but and'. Suggestion: use 'I rarely eat...' and 'I also rarely eat...' for clarity.

× But chocolate I eat as a second meal.

✓ But I eat chocolate as a second snack/meal.

Word order should be subject-verb-object: 'I eat chocolate'. Also 'second meal' is odd; 'second snack' or 'as a second treat' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'I eat chocolate as a second snack'.

× For me it will. After that I will well.

✓ For me, it helps. After that, I feel well.

Original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Likely intent: eating chocolate makes them feel better. Use 'it helps' and 'I feel well' or 'I feel better'. Suggestion: clarify meaning and use complete sentences with proper verbs.