耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 전반적으로 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'later than reacting impulsively' 부분은 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'rather than reacting impulsively'로 수정하면 더 자연스러운 표현이 됩니다. 또한, 문장 길이가 조금 길어 중복되는 부분을 줄이고 명확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, when I face challenging situations at work, I try to stay calm and think things through carefully rather than reacting impulsively. This helps me handle stress better and make wiser decisions.

建議: 답변에 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'wait important things'는 'wait for important things'로 수정해야 하며, 'walk my desk online'은 의미가 불분명합니다. 좀 더 구체적이고 명확한 예시를 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I feel impatient when I have to wait for important things, like a delayed meeting or a slow Internet connection. For instance, if my Internet keeps dropping while I am working online, I get very frustrated.

建議: 답변에 문법 오류('concentration tend' → 'concentration tends', 'starting losing' → 'start losing')와 어색한 표현('taking break short breaks')이 있습니다. 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 다듬고, 연결어 사용을 개선하면 좋겠습니다.

範例: I usually feel physically and mentally exhausted and sometimes a bit bored when I have to do something for a long time. For example, if I study for several hours straight, my concentration tends to drop and I start losing motivation. Therefore, I find that taking short breaks helps me refresh my mind and work more effectively.

建議: 답변에 문법적 오류('treating with' → 'treating', 'who struggle' → 'who struggles', 'increasing survival rate of patient' → 'increase the survival rate of patients')가 있습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, my job definitely requires a great deal of patience. For example, when treating a cancer patient who struggles to survive, I need to remain calm and supportive to help them. Patience is essential to create a positive treatment environment and increase the patients' survival rates.

建議: 답변에 중복된 단어('I I')와 어색한 표현('I learned I would learn the period of patience')가 있습니다. 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 다듬고, 연결어를 적절히 사용하여 논리적인 흐름을 개선해야 합니다.

範例: Yes, I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I often wanted immediate results and found it hard to wait. However, with age and experience, I have learned the importance of patience, especially in challenging situations.

× when I face challenging situation at work

✓ when I face challenging situations at work

'Situation' should be plural 'situations' because it refers to multiple instances in general, not a single one.

× think things through carefully later than reacting impulsively

✓ think things through carefully rather than reacting impulsively

The phrase 'later than' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'rather than' to express preference between two actions.

× I feel impatient when I wait important things

✓ I feel impatient when I wait for important things

The verb 'wait' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by an object.

× when I walk my desk online

✓ when I work at my desk online

The phrase 'walk my desk' is incorrect; it should be 'work at my desk' to convey the intended meaning.

× my concentration tend to drop

✓ my concentration tends to drop

The subject 'concentration' is singular, so the verb should be 'tends' to agree in number.

× I starting losing motivation

✓ I start losing motivation

The verb 'starting' is incorrectly used; the base form 'start' should be used here to match the present tense.

× taking break short breaks helps me refresh my mind

✓ taking short breaks helps me refresh my mind

The phrase 'taking break short breaks' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'taking short breaks'.

× when treating with a cancer patient who struggle to survive

✓ when treating a cancer patient who struggles to survive

The verb 'treat' does not require the preposition 'with'; also, 'patient' is singular so 'struggles' should be used.

× a cancer patient who struggle to survive

✓ a cancer patient who struggles to survive

The singular noun 'patient' requires the singular verb 'struggles' for subject-verb agreement.

× to create a positive treating environment

✓ to create a positive treatment environment

The noun 'treating' is incorrect here; the correct noun form is 'treatment'.

× ensure increasing survival rate of patient

✓ ensure increasing survival rate of patients

The plural 'patients' is appropriate here because it refers to multiple individuals.

× As a child I I often wanted immediate result

✓ As a child I often wanted immediate results

The plural 'results' is correct because 'immediate result' is a general concept and usually pluralized.

× But with age and experiences I learned I would learn the period of patience especially in challenging situations

✓ But with age and experience, I learned the value of patience, especially in challenging situations

The original sentence is awkward and unclear; 'experience' should be singular, and the phrase 'learned the value of patience' is clearer and grammatically correct.