耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct grammar and vocabulary, such as 'patient' instead of 'patience' when describing a person. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and clear. For example, start with a direct answer and then add a reason or example using linking words.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person now because living alone in Canada has taught me the importance of patience in daily life.

建議: Focus on completing your sentences clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Be specific about what makes you impatient and explain briefly.

範例: I feel impatient when I have to wait a long time to find a job, especially when I first arrived in Canada and was worried about my future.

建議: Make sure to complete your thoughts and avoid unfinished sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons or examples using linking words.

範例: To be honest, I feel irritated when I have to do something for a long time because it makes me lose focus and interest.

建議: Use correct grammar and vocabulary, such as 'patient' instead of 'patients'. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details connected with linking words. Be specific about how your job requires patience.

範例: Yes, my job at the food court requires me to be patient because I interact with many customers who have different moods and reactions, so I need to stay calm and understanding.

建議: Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid awkward phrases. Use linking words to compare past and present and provide specific reasons for your increased patience.

範例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to be stubborn and cry easily, but as an adult, I understand the value of money and life, which has made me more patient.

× I'm not a patience person in my past

✓ I wasn't a patient person in the past

The word 'patience' is a noun, but here an adjective 'patient' is needed to describe the person. Also, 'in my past' is better expressed as 'in the past' for natural English.

× nowadays I living alone in Canada

✓ nowadays I am living alone in Canada

The present continuous tense requires the auxiliary verb 'am' before the '-ing' form 'living' to be grammatically correct.

× I understand the value of patient in my life

✓ I understand the value of patience in my life

'Patient' is an adjective, but here the noun 'patience' is needed to refer to the quality or concept.

× Now I consider myself as a patience person

✓ Now I consider myself a patient person

Again, 'patient' is the correct adjective to describe a person, not 'patience' which is a noun. Also, 'consider myself as' should be 'consider myself' without 'as'.

× There's a lot of things that make me impatient

✓ There are a lot of things that make me impatient

'Things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× when I came to Canada I I'm really think and worried about my job

✓ when I came to Canada I really thought and worried about my job

The past tense 'came' requires the verbs 'think' and 'worry' to be in past tense as well: 'thought' and 'worried'. Also, 'I'm' is incorrect here.

× I need a job within a one day, 2 days

✓ I needed a job within one or two days

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'one day', and '2' should be written as 'two' in formal speech. Also, past tense 'needed' fits the context.

× But as a living in Canada, I.

✓ But as I am living in Canada, I have learned to be patient.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. Adding 'I am living' and completing the thought makes it grammatically correct.

× I feel very irritated and I really like.

✓ I feel very irritated and I really dislike it.

The sentence 'I really like' is incomplete and lacks an object or complement. Adding 'dislike it' clarifies the meaning.

× my job required to be a patients

✓ my job requires me to be patient

'Required to be a patients' is incorrect; 'requires me to be patient' is the correct form. 'Patients' is plural noun, but 'patient' is the adjective needed here.

× we meet with different kind of people who has different moods

✓ we meet different kinds of people who have different moods

'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' to agree with 'different', and 'has' should be 'have' to agree with plural 'people'.

× Sometimes they're showing on like small thing

✓ Sometimes they show anger over small things

The phrase 'showing on like small thing' is incorrect. 'Show anger over small things' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× sometimes they didn't. They don't react on a big thing

✓ sometimes they don't react to big things

'Didn't' is past tense and incomplete here; 'don't react' is present tense. Also, 'react on' should be 'react to', and 'a big thing' should be plural 'big things'.

× now I consider myself a quite patient person

✓ now I consider myself quite a patient person

'Quite' should come before the article 'a' and adjective 'patient' to form the correct phrase 'quite a patient person'.

× I always out cried and I'm stubborn from my things from my parents

✓ I always cried a lot and I was stubborn about things with my parents

'Out cried' is incorrect; 'cried a lot' is correct. Also, 'I'm stubborn from my things from my parents' is unclear; 'I was stubborn about things with my parents' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× But now as I in my adult age I know the value of money

✓ But now, as an adult, I know the value of money

The phrase 'as I in my adult age' is incorrect. 'As an adult' is the correct expression.