耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn để làm câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I usually remain calm in situations like waiting for public transport or solving unexpected work problems. However, I sometimes feel frustrated when I depend on others who lack organization.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'unmounted' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn, đồng thời dùng từ nối để liên kết ý tốt hơn.

範例: I usually feel impatient when dealing with careless people. For instance, if I make plans and someone arrives late without informing me, it really annoys me because I highly value punctuality and good time management.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để làm rõ ý hơn.

範例: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to stay calm and patient. For example, waiting for public transport or solving unexpected problems at work requires me to be persistent and composed.

建議: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như 'uh' và chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều/số ít (require -> requires). Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có liên kết giữa các ý.

範例: Yes, my job as a business analyst definitely requires patience. I need to analyze market trends, develop strategies, and coordinate with different teams to help the company succeed.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp thì và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có kết luận rõ ràng và tránh bỏ dở câu cuối.

範例: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I wanted everything to happen immediately and couldn't stand waiting. However, with maturity and experience, I have learned to control my emotions and remain calm in stressful situations.

× I tend to stay calmed when things don't go as planned, like waiting for public transport or finding solutions to unexpected problems at work.

✓ I tend to stay calm when things don't go as planned, like waiting for public transport or finding solutions to unexpected problems at work.

The word 'calmed' is the past participle form of the verb 'calm' and is incorrectly used here as an adjective. The correct adjective form is 'calm' to describe a state of being relaxed or not agitated.

× I tend to lose my motivations when I have to deal with people who are careless and unmounted.

✓ I tend to lose my motivation when I have to deal with people who are careless and unmotivated.

The noun 'motivation' is uncountable, so 'motivations' is incorrect here. Also, 'unmounted' is not the correct adjective; the intended word is likely 'unmotivated' to describe people lacking motivation.

× I value time management, so delays on this organization.

✓ I value time management, so delays in this organization frustrate me.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'frustrate me' completes the thought and 'delays in this organization' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× With the unexpected situations are required time and patience.

✓ Unexpected situations require time and patience.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words. The corrected sentence is clear and grammatically correct.

× I always tend to stay calmed line waiting for public transport or finding solution to unexpected problems at work.

✓ I always tend to stay calm while waiting for public transport or finding solutions to unexpected problems at work.

'Calmed' should be 'calm' as an adjective. 'Line' is incorrect and should be 'while' to indicate simultaneous actions. 'Solution' should be plural 'solutions' to match the context.

× My job require a lot of time, knowledge and patience because I'm a business analyst.

✓ My job requires a lot of time, knowledge and patience because I'm a business analyst.

The subject 'job' is singular, so the verb should be 'requires' to agree in number.

× ...coordinating with the various developments to achieve our companies.

✓ ...coordinating with various departments to achieve our company's goals.

'Developments' is incorrect in this context; likely 'departments' is intended. Also, 'our companies' is vague; 'our company's goals' is clearer and uses the possessive form correctly.

× Maybe maturity and experience has made me a much more.

✓ Maybe maturity and experience have made me much more patient.

The subject is plural ('maturity and experience'), so the verb should be 'have'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'patient' completes the meaning.