耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了耐心的概念，但语言表达不够自然，有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For instance, I once spent several hours hand-sewing a blue jacket so my son could wear it on Easter. Completing that task gave me a great sense of achievement.

建議: 回答内容具体，但语法和表达有些混乱。建议注意时态和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: I sometimes feel impatient when my son delays doing his homework or getting ready for school, especially when we are running late. However, I understand that children are still learning to manage their time, so I try to be more understanding.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议完整表达观点，避免句子残缺，并使用恰当的连接词。

範例: I find long tasks challenging, but I manage them by breaking them into smaller steps. For example, if I start a business, I would plan finances, obtain a license, and establish sales channels step by step.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用正确的词汇和完整句子，避免句子中断，并提高表达的连贯性。

範例: Although I don't have a formal job, I am studying English and investing in the stock market. Both require patience. For instance, when the market falls, I need to stay calm and decide whether to sell or hold for long-term gains.

建議: 回答内容有些矛盾且表达不够清晰，建议理清思路，避免重复，并用连贯的句子表达对比。

範例: I believe I am more patient now when facing challenges. Although I was more patient with activities like writing and playing instruments as a child, I now try different methods to solve problems instead of giving up.

× I can be very focused into a job, stay hours to fix the project.

✓ I can be very focused on a job, staying hours to fix the project.

动词后面应该用介词on而不是into，且stay后应使用动名词形式staying表示持续的动作。

× once I once I sold a blue jacket by hand in order to dress up my son into a little brown knot hair on the Easter dressing up day.

✓ once I sold a blue jacket by hand in order to dress up my son with a little brown knot hair on Easter dressing up day.

句中重复了once，应删除多余部分；dress up后应使用介词with来表示装扮的方式。

× I stuck to that job for a whole day and felt a great sense of fulfillment when it's been finished.

✓ I stuck to that job for a whole day and felt a great sense of fulfillment when it was finished.

完成时态使用错误，应该用过去时was finished而不是现在完成时it's been finished。

× Then I would got impatient and shout at home.

✓ Then I would get impatient and shout at home.

would后面应接动词原形，got是过去式，应改为get。

× I do feel impatient on some kinds of things.

✓ I do feel impatient about some kinds of things.

impatient后应接介词about而不是on。

× children haven't yet grown mature enough to have strong sense of time.

✓ children haven't yet grown mature enough to have a strong sense of time.

strong sense前应加冠词a。

× I'm dedicating in studying English and meanwhile investing in fund market.

✓ I'm dedicating myself to studying English and meanwhile investing in the fund market.

dedicate后应接反身代词myself和介词to；fund market前应加定冠词the。

× Both of the two jobs need patient a lot.

✓ Both of the two jobs need a lot of patience.

patient是形容词，需用名词patience表示耐心。

× This can be challenge and need a lot of.

✓ This can be challenging and needs a lot of patience.

challenge应改为形容词challenging；need后应加第三人称单数s。

× I think I'm more patient now than as a child when facing with challenges.

✓ I think I'm more patient now than as a child when facing challenges.

face后不接介词with。

× I show I showed more patience when I was a child than now.

✓ I showed more patience when I was a child than now.

show前多余，应删除；时态保持过去式showed。

× but but now I would try different ways and to work out a solution.

✓ but now I would try different ways to work out a solution.

重复but，应删除一个；and后不应接to不定式，直接用to work out。