耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınız doğal ancak daha açık ve akıcı olmalı. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolaylı ifadelerden kaçının. Cümlenizi doğrudan ve net kurarak, neden sabırsız olduğunuzu daha spesifik açıklayın.

範例: No, I am not a patient person because I often get nervous and frustrated in simple situations, especially when people say things that don't make sense.

建議: Cevabınızı daha düzenli ve akıcı hale getirin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri birbirine bağlayın ve örneklerinizi daha net ifade edin.

範例: I feel impatient when people move slowly, for example, when I am walking on the right side of the road and others walk very slowly. Also, I get impatient if someone speaks slowly.

建議: Cümleniz karmaşık ve anlaşılması zor. Daha basit ve doğrudan ifadeler kullanarak düşüncelerinizi net aktarın. Ayrıca, cümle yapınızı geliştirin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

範例: Generally, if I love my work, I don't mind doing it for a long time because I enjoy what I do.

建議: Cevabınızda daha akıcı ve doğal ifadeler kullanın. Bağlaçlarla cümleleri birbirine bağlayarak mantıklı bir akış oluşturun ve mesleğinizin sabır gerektirdiğini daha net açıklayın.

範例: Yes, I am an interior designer. My job requires patience because I have to carefully plan the decoration and arrange every detail precisely, which takes a long time.

建議: Cümlenizi daha açık ve düzgün kurun. Düşüncelerinizi net ifade edin ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlelerinizi birbirine bağlayın.

範例: I'm not sure, but my mom told me I was an impatient child. Now, I try to be more patient because I understand my personality better.

× No, I'm not 'cause I'm getting nervous and angry sometimes in a basic situation.

✓ No, I'm not because I get nervous and angry sometimes in basic situations.

The use of 'I'm getting' suggests a continuous action, but the sentence refers to a habitual reaction, so the simple present tense 'I get' is appropriate. Also, 'cause' should be expanded to 'because' for formality, and 'a basic situation' should be pluralized to 'basic situations' to indicate general cases.

× Like doesn't mean.

✓ Like it doesn't mean anything.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'it' as the subject and 'doesn't mean anything' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× if someone moves slowly, uh, I can stand like I'm walking on the road, the right side of the road and the people are moved so slowly.

✓ If someone moves slowly, like when I'm walking on the right side of the road and people are moving very slowly, I get impatient.

The phrase 'I can stand like' is incorrect; it should be 'I get impatient'. Also, 'the people are moved' is passive and incorrect here; it should be 'people are moving'. The preposition 'on the road, the right side' is better expressed as 'on the right side of the road'.

× someone talks slowly.

✓ someone talks slowly.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× Generally my lifestyles like if I am a loving my works, it will be a long time works and I am happy with that 'cause I'm trying to be much loved this job, uh.

✓ Generally, my lifestyle is such that if I love my work, it will be long-term work and I am happy with that because I'm trying to love this job more.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues: 'lifestyles' should be singular 'lifestyle'; 'if I am a loving my works' is incorrect, should be 'if I love my work'; 'long time works' should be 'long-term work'; 'trying to be much loved this job' is incorrect, should be 'trying to love this job more'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I am interior designer and our jobs like you think first of the plans, uh, decoration of the furniture then you should umm, arrange the millimeters and details.

✓ Yes, I am an interior designer and our job involves first thinking about the plans, the decoration of the furniture, then arranging the measurements and details.

Missing article 'an' before 'interior designer'. 'Our jobs like you think' is incorrect; it should be 'our job involves first thinking'. 'Arrange the millimeters' is awkward; 'arranging the measurements' is more natural. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× That's why it's a long process.

✓ That's why it's a long process.

This sentence is correct and does not require correction.

× I'm not sure but my mom told me that I'm a impatient child and she says no to.

✓ I'm not sure, but my mom told me that I was an impatient child and she said no to that.

'I'm a impatient' should be 'I was an impatient' to match past tense. 'She says no to' is incomplete; it should be 'she said no to that' to clarify the object. The sentence is adjusted for tense consistency and completeness.

× I'm trying to be patient 'cause I'm. I know now my personality.

✓ I'm trying to be patient because I know my personality now.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. Combining the two parts into a single coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.