耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınız doğal ancak biraz daha akıcı ve net olabilir. "Despite the fact that can affect me" ifadesi belirsiz ve dilbilgisi açısından eksik. Daha açık ve akıcı cümleler kurmaya çalışın.

範例: I consider myself a patient person because I can control my emotions well, even when I face difficult situations, whether they come from outside or inside.

建議: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları var ve bağlaç kullanımı eksik. "Main thing that can destroy my patience" yerine "The main thing that destroys my patience" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, örneği bağlamak için "For example" iyi, ancak cümleleri daha akıcı bağlayabilirsiniz.

範例: The main thing that destroys my patience is when someone does not respect me, my emotions, or my behavior. For example, if someone starts making noise in the office, I quickly lose my temper.

建議: Cümleleriniz biraz karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "That's not a problem for me to do the similar job" yerine "It's not a problem for me to do similar work for a long time" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, bağlaçları daha etkili kullanarak cümleleri birbirine bağlayabilirsiniz.

範例: It's not a problem for me to do similar work for a long time. However, it becomes very difficult and frustrating when I have to repeat the same task because it was not done correctly the first time.

建議: Cümleniz anlamlı ancak "patient to our patients" ifadesi yerine "patient with our patients" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, "hospital environment" yerine "a hospital environment" demelisiniz. Daha doğal ifadeler kullanmaya çalışın.

範例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work in a hospital environment, and it is essential to be patient with both patients and colleagues.

建議: Cümlenizde bazı kelime seçimleri ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "When I was child" yerine "when I was a child" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, "psychomotor and cognitive skills" ifadesi biraz teknik ve günlük konuşmada nadiren kullanılır. Daha basit ve doğal ifadeler tercih edin.

範例: Yes, of course I am. I have learned how to control my emotions better now. When I was a child, I didn't realize how important it was to stay calm and patient.

× I consider myself to be a patient person because I can fully control my emotions despite the fact that can affect me.

✓ I consider myself to be a patient person because I can fully control my emotions despite the fact that they can affect me.

The sentence is missing the subject 'they' before 'can affect me'. In English, clauses need explicit subjects; omitting 'they' causes a grammatical error related to the 'there be' or subject presence issue.

× It doesn't matter externally or internally.

✓ It doesn't matter whether it is externally or internally.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper structure. Adding 'whether it is' clarifies the meaning and corrects the implied singular/plural ambiguity.

× Main thing that can destroy my patience is when person does not respect me or my emotions or my behavior.

✓ The main thing that can destroy my patience is when a person does not respect me, my emotions, or my behavior.

The sentence is missing the article 'The' before 'main thing' and 'a' before 'person'. Articles are necessary to specify singular nouns properly.

× For example when someone starts to be noisy in an office, I cannot control myself and become angry very fast.

✓ For example, when someone starts to be noisy in an office, I cannot control myself and become angry very quickly.

The adverb 'fast' should be replaced with 'quickly' to correctly modify the verb 'become'. Also, a comma is needed after 'For example' for proper sentence structure.

× That's not a problem for me to do the similar job for a long time.

✓ That's not a problem for me to do a similar job for a long time.

The article 'the' before 'similar job' is incorrect here; 'a' should be used to indicate any similar job, not a specific one.

× However, it becomes so hard and even impossible to bear when the work I'm doing is not done from the first time.

✓ However, it becomes very hard and even impossible to bear when the work I'm doing is not done correctly the first time.

The phrase 'not done from the first time' is awkward and unclear. Rephrasing to 'not done correctly the first time' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So when I have to repeat the same task really drives me crazy and creates impatience.

✓ So, when I have to repeat the same task, it really drives me crazy and creates impatience.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'drives'. Adding 'it' as the subject corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, my job is a great example of requiring patience because I'm working in hospital environment and it is a must for us to be patient to our patients and other colleagues.

✓ Yes, my job is a great example of requiring patience because I'm working in a hospital environment and it is a must for us to be patient with our patients and other colleagues.

The phrase 'in hospital environment' needs the article 'a'. Also, the correct preposition is 'patient with' not 'patient to' when referring to people.

× In contrast, when I was child, I didn't understand the necessity of staying calm and patient.

✓ In contrast, when I was a child, I didn't understand the necessity of staying calm and patient.

The phrase 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child' to correctly indicate singular noun usage.