耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有重复。建议简化句子，注意语法正确性，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: To be honest, I am not usually a very patient person. However, when it comes to achieving my goals, I try to be very patient and work hard. On the other hand, I find it difficult to be patient with naughty children.

建議: 回答中表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，重复使用“naughty”，缺少连贯性。建议简化句子，使用恰当的词汇，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: I feel impatient when I am traveling, especially on a plane or train. If there is a noisy child nearby who keeps yelling, it makes me feel very uncomfortable and impatient.

建議: 句子表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，且内容重复。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意语法，并用连接词丰富内容。

範例: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to be patient and focus all my attention on it. This helps me achieve my goals and move closer to my dreams, such as owning my dream house in the future.

建議: 回答内容不完整且表达混乱，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议明确回答问题，提供具体例子，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience. For example, when I organize activities for junior high students, I need to pay close attention to details and handle unexpected situations calmly.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，且内容不够具体。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并用连接词丰富内容。

範例: I don't think I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I wanted many things like candies and pretty dresses. Although I had to do chores I didn't like, I still asked my mom for these things.

× For me, I should to be honest, I'm not a really patient person like people always say, because for things I wanna do or for reach to my goals, I will be really, really patient and do a lot of efforts to get it.

✓ For me, I should be honest, I'm not a really patient person like people always say, because for things I wanna do or to reach my goals, I will be really, really patient and put in a lot of effort to get it.

错误在于“should to be honest”中“should”后不应加“to”，正确用法是“should be honest”。另外，“for reach to my goals”中“for”应改为“to”，因为动词不定式“to reach”表示目的。还有“do a lot of efforts”应改为“put in a lot of effort”，因为“effort”不可数，且常用短语是“put in effort”。

× For me, when I come, when I be impatient, this must be on a plane or the train to my dream place.

✓ For me, when I come, when I am impatient, this must be on a plane or the train to my dream place.

“when I be impatient”中“be”应改为“am”，因为主语是第一人称单数，谓语动词应用现在时态的“am”。

× there's a noisy and naughty boy surrounded me and he's noisy, naughty yell, he's naughty yelling and at that.

✓ there's a noisy and naughty boy surrounding me and he's noisily yelling, he's naughty and yelling like that.

“surrounded me”应改为“surrounding me”，因为这里需要现在分词作状语，表示正在发生的动作。动词“yell”用作动名词时应为“yelling”，且副词“noisily”修饰动词。

× When I'm doing something that I insisted so I will be really, really patient and I will pay all my attention to it so that I can reach my goals, I can reach my dreams so that maybe can take me to my dream ho house or in the future.

✓ When I'm doing something that I insist on, I will be really, really patient and I will pay all my attention to it so that I can reach my goals, I can reach my dreams so that maybe it can take me to my dream house in the future.

“that I insisted”应改为“that I insist on”，因为“insist”后面需要介词“on”，且时态应与上下文一致用现在时。句中“ho house”应为“house”，且“maybe can take me”应加主语“it”。

× I've held some business activities before, such as the some for junior high students.

✓ I've held some business activities before, such as some for junior high students.

“the some”是错误的冠词搭配，应去掉“the”，因为“some”本身表示不定量，不需要定冠词。

× So we in some some student was involved in.

✓ So some students were involved.

原句结构混乱且代词使用错误，应简化为“So some students were involved.”，主语和谓语需一致，且“student”应为复数“students”。

× So when you are preparing for those activities, you have to pay a lot of attention.

✓ So when you are preparing for those activities, you have to pay a lot of attention to them.

“pay attention”后通常需要介词“to”加宾语，表示“注意某事”，缺少宾语使句子不完整。

× For me, I don't think so 'cause be a child.

✓ For me, I don't think so because when I was a child.

“'cause be a child”语法错误，应改为“because when I was a child”，使用完整的连词“because”并补充完整的从句。

× So I will ask my mom to buy for me and then she will ask me to do something that I don't want to do it, but I still need to pay.

✓ So I will ask my mom to buy for me and then she will ask me to do something that I don't want to do, but I still need to obey.

“do something that I don't want to do it”中“it”多余，应去掉。最后“need to pay”用词错误，应为“need to obey”表示“我仍然需要服从”。