耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and avoid irrelevant phrases. Focus on correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., "I consider myself a patient person when learning new skills"), and give a concrete example with timeframe and result.

範例: I consider myself a patient person, especially when I learn new skills. For example, last year I practiced guitar for six months and kept practising daily without getting frustrated, which helped me play three complete songs.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence stating the main cause of impatience, then give a specific and relevant example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant details; use correct nouns and verbs.

範例: Long waiting periods make me impatient, especially when I am stuck in traffic because I lose time. For example, when my commute takes an extra hour with no clear reason, I feel frustrated and anxious.

建議: Begin with a direct statement about your feelings, then give specific reasons and one example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example". Correct vocabulary (e.g., "mentally tired", "repetitive tasks") and sentence structure will make your response clearer.

範例: I often feel mentally tired when I work on something for a long time because repetitive tasks drain my concentration. For example, after four hours of data entry I need a short break to refresh and maintain accuracy.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then add a concrete example of when patience is needed at work. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "students" or "clients" instead of "lady") and correct tense agreement. Keep it concise and include a result to show effectiveness of your patience.

範例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I teach students who learn at different paces. For example, I often repeat explanations and provide extra exercises, which helps most students understand the material better.

建議: State clearly that you are more patient now and give specific reasons with examples (e.g., life experience, work). Use linking words ("because", "so", "for example") and correct grammar ("than", "as I grew up"). Avoid vague phrases like "something" or "all the".

範例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because life and work experience have taught me self-control. For example, in conflicts at work I now pause to think before reacting, which helps maintain good relationships.

× Yes, I consider myself as a patient person most of the talent especially when during long term past like studying or learning new new skills.

✓ Yes, I consider myself a patient person most of the time, especially during long periods such as when studying or learning new skills.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns/phrases and extra words. Remove 'as' after 'consider myself' and replace 'most of the talent' with 'most of the time'. Use 'during long periods' for duration and 'such as' to introduce examples. Also remove duplicated 'new'.

× For example, I can tell you 50 because I think over a week without getting frustrated because I've lived Daddy ever yelled better results.

✓ For example, I can study for a week without getting frustrated because I have seen better results from being patient.

The original is incoherent and has many incorrect phrases ('I can tell you 50', 'I've lived Daddy ever yelled'). Recast to a clear meaning that fits context: studying for a week without frustration and seeing better results. Use present perfect 'have seen' to indicate experience.

× Long period make me feel impatient, especially with the latest car by four of the 9 languages rather than unavoidable circumstances.

✓ Long periods make me feel impatient, especially with tasks that take a long time or are repetitive rather than unavoidable circumstances.

Use plural 'periods' to match general statement (quantifier issue). The rest of the sentence is unclear; replace with a coherent phrase about tasks that are lengthy or repetitive. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'periods make'.

× I often feel a means of tiredness and mental failure to but not have to do something for a long time, especially if that's half as repetitive or non mountains for example.

✓ I often feel tired and mentally drained when I have to do something for a long time, especially if it is repetitive or monotonous.

Original mixes awkward phrases and wrong agreement. Replace 'a means of tiredness and mental failure' with 'tired and mentally drained'. Use 'when I have to' for condition and 'it is repetitive or monotonous' for clarity.

× After starting for several hours I usually need to belong back to reflect my consideration.

✓ After working for several hours I usually need to take a break to reflect and recharge.

'Belong back to reflect my consideration' is incorrect. Use 'need to take a break' and 'to reflect and recharge' to express intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, my job definitely required a lot of patience because I often deal with lady who learn at different times and needed repeated explanations.

✓ Yes, my job definitely requires a lot of patience because I often deal with people who learn at different paces and need repeated explanations.

Use present tense 'requires' to match current job. 'Lady' is incorrect; use 'people' or 'learners'. Use 'who learn at different paces' and present 'need' for repeated explanations.

× Yes I'm definitely more patient now then I was gonna try growing.

✓ Yes, I'm definitely more patient now than I was when I was growing up.

Use 'than' for comparison (not 'then'), and correct the phrase 'gonna try growing' to 'when I was growing up'. Fix contraction spacing and tense.

× All the has taught me to think before reacting and to tolerate the life or something especially at work or in relationships.

✓ All of this has taught me to think before reacting and to tolerate difficulties in life, especially at work or in relationships.

Replace 'All the' with 'All of this' and 'to tolerate the life or something' with 'to tolerate difficulties in life'. Use 'in life' as correct preposition and clarify meaning.