耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize response: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and avoid filler words. Correct verb forms and tense (e.g., "when I am stuck"), and clarify the examples (name of podcasts or videos) or simply describe what helped you. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can stay calm in stressful situations. For example, when I am stuck in traffic, I listen to calming podcasts and watch short mindfulness videos, which help me relax and wait without getting upset.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the main cause, then give a specific example with correct tense and grammar. Avoid vague phrasing and repetition. Use linking words such as "for example" and explain briefly why it makes you impatient (feel disrespected, wastes time).

範例: I get most impatient when people are unreliable. For example, if someone promises to arrive in ten minutes but turns up thirty minutes late, I feel disrespected because it wastes my time and shows a lack of consideration.

建議: Make a clear, grammatical topic sentence about your attitude to long tasks, then provide concrete strategies you use. Avoid unclear words like "passion myself"; instead say "motivate myself". Use linking words like "therefore" or "so" to connect ideas and limit to two supporting details.

範例: I feel patient and optimistic when a task takes a long time because I expect good results in the end. Therefore, I motivate myself by setting small goals and focusing fully on one task at a time to avoid distractions.

建議: Answer directly whether the job requires patience, then give a specific situation where patience is needed. Use correct grammar (e.g., "my job doesn't require patience"), and replace unclear phrases like "do more passion" with "show patience" or "remain calm." Keep it to two supporting details at most.

範例: My job doesn't usually require constant patience, but it becomes important when I deal with clients. For instance, in difficult client meetings I need to remain calm and listen carefully to resolve complex issues.

建議: State clearly that you are more patient now and give specific reasons and examples for the change. Use correct words ("patient" not "passionate"), correct tense and articles ("when I was a child"). Explain briefly what experiences taught you patience. Avoid vague phrases like "afraid of really adorable person."

範例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child I struggled to control my emotions, but growing up and facing challenges at work taught me to stay calm and think before I react.

× Definitely I am a patient person uh, because I know how to control myself, especially when I stuck in a traffic jam.

✓ Definitely I am a patient person, because I know how to control myself, especially when I am stuck in a traffic jam.

Incorrect verb form after time clause: 'when I stuck' lacks the auxiliary 'am'. Use 'when I am stuck' to form the present tense passive/predicate state. Also added a comma before 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'be' + past participle for states (am stuck).

× This time I try to control myself some I like I was 8 podcast, Moby and also video which helped me to be patient more.

✓ These days I try to control myself; I like podcasts such as 'Moby' and videos which help me become more patient.

Multiple present tense and count noun errors: 'This time' is better as 'These days' for current habit; 'I try' should match plural noun 'podcasts' and 'help' should be in present tense for habitual actions. 'I was 8 podcast' is ungrammatical—use 'podcasts such as' and change 'helped me to be patient more' to 'help me become more patient'. Suggestion: maintain present simple for habits and use correct plural forms for countable nouns.

× There are a lot of things always make me impatient, but uh, more firstly, uh, commitment.

✓ There are a lot of things that always make me impatient, but firstly, commitments.

Count noun agreement: 'commitment' should be plural 'commitments' to match 'a lot of things' and general discussion. Also missing relative pronoun 'that' after 'things' to connect the clause. Suggestion: pluralize general nouns and include necessary connectors.

× For example, if someone say will come 10 minutes later, but he came 30 minute later.

✓ For example, if someone says they will come 10 minutes late but he came 30 minutes later.

Tense and agreement errors: 'say' should be third person singular 'says'; conditional/time reference requires 'will come' for future; use '10 minutes late' not 'later'; '30 minute' needs plural 'minutes'. Also mixed pronouns—ideally use consistent pronouns (they/he). Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct plural forms for time expressions.

× He's also uh, shown like he is disrespect me and he don't know the value of time.

✓ He also shows that he disrespects me and doesn't know the value of time.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'shown like' is incorrect—use 'shows that'; 'disrespect me' needs verb 'disrespects' for third person; 'he don't' must be 'he doesn't'. Suggestion: use 'shows that' to introduce a clause and ensure subject-verb agreement with third person singular.

× I always believe, uh, when, uh, it's take time, it would be, will come, uh, a great feedback, feedback.

✓ I always believe that when something takes time, good feedback will come.

Tense and clause structure: 'it's take time' is incorrect—use 'something takes time' (present simple for general truth). Remove redundant modal combination 'would be, will come'—use 'will come' for future result. Also 'a great feedback, feedback' is awkward; use 'good feedback'. Suggestion: simplify clauses and use present simple for general truths and 'will' for expected future outcomes.

× So I always try to passion myself and also I don't, I do my, my work with my 100% priority who's helped me to complete the work and I don't distract more.

✓ So I always try to motivate myself, and I do my work with 100% priority, which helps me complete the tasks and avoid distractions.

Wrong word choice and relative clause errors: 'passion myself' is incorrect—use 'motivate myself' or 'be patient'; 'my 100% priority' is awkward—'with 100% priority' or 'with full focus' works; 'who's helped' should be 'which helps' referring to the practice. 'I don't distract more' is ungrammatical—use 'avoid distractions'. Suggestion: choose appropriate verbs/adjectives and correct relative pronoun 'which' for things.

× As per my concern, uh, job is, doesn't require patient, but it's essential when, uh, you deal with client this time, uh, how you can, uh, overcome from a complex, complex situation that time people need to do, uh, do more passion.

✓ In my opinion, the job does not require patience, but it is essential when you deal with clients; at that time you must handle complex situations and show more patience.

Multiple errors: 'As per my concern' is unnatural—use 'In my opinion'; missing definite article 'the job'; 'doesn't require patient' should be 'does not require patience' (noun form). 'Deal with client' needs plural 'clients'. 'Overcome from' is wrong—use 'handle' or 'overcome' without 'from'. 'Do more passion' should be 'show more patience'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms, articles, and verbs for idiomatic expressions.

× Obviously, uh, I am more passionate now.

✓ Obviously, I am more patient now.

Wrong word choice/adjective: 'passionate' means enthusiastic, but context asks about patience—use 'patient'. Suggestion: choose the adjective that matches the intended meaning.

× When I was child, uh, I wasn't able to control myself because uh, uh, I was afraid of really adorable person in my family.

✓ When I was a child, I wasn't able to control myself because I was afraid of a very strict person in my family.

Articles and word choice: missing article 'a child'; 'really adorable person' contradicts 'afraid'—likely intended 'strict' or 'authoritarian'. Also simplify repetition. Suggestion: include necessary articles and choose adjectives that match the meaning.

× But now I learn the reality.

✓ But now I have learned the reality.

Tense: 'learn' should be present perfect 'have learned' to indicate a change from past to present. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences that affect the present.

× I have uh, some experience.

✓ I have some experience.

Extra filler: remove unnecessary filler 'uh,'. Grammar is otherwise correct but ensure natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep concise: 'I have some experience.'

× So I think I have more passion now.

✓ So I think I am more patient now.

Wrong adjective: 'passion' is a noun and does not match context; intended meaning is 'patient'. Use 'I am more patient now' or 'I have more patience now'. Suggestion: use correct noun/adjective pair for clarity.