耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No/It depends), then give one specific example with a linking word. Fix grammar (e.g., "if it takes"), avoid fillers like "so kinda." Aim for 2–3 sentences only.

範例: It depends. For short waits, like 10–15 minutes for a bus, I get impatient and would rather take a taxi or walk; however, for longer delays I can tolerate waiting if I have something to read or listen to.

建議: Begin with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and run-on sentences. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "I dislike being idle").

範例: I feel impatient when I have to be idle for long periods. For example, standing in long queues or waiting without anything to do frustrates me because I prefer staying active and productive.

建議: Provide a clear opening statement about your feelings, then give specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g., "therefore," "for example"). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing like "You have to be planned."

範例: I feel that long tasks require patience and persistence. Therefore, I try to set a clear plan and stay disciplined; for example, when studying for exams I break work into weekly goals to stay motivated.

建議: Answer directly, then relate how your studies demand patience with one concrete example. Correct grammar ("I have to plan"), avoid extra words and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I don't have a job at the moment; I'm a student, so yes my studies require patience. For example, I plan a weekly study schedule to review each subject consistently and meet my course deadlines.

建議: Give a clear comparison (more/less/same) and support it with a specific childhood example. Fix grammar and odd phrasing (e.g., "counting down the days"). Avoid short unclear endings like "It must be."

範例: I think I'm about the same now as when I was a child. For instance, as a child I used to count down the six months until summer and cross off each day, which shows I could be very patient when I wanted something.

× For example if I'm waiting for a bus I can't wait like 10 or 15 minutes, but if it's takes longer than that I will take taxi or decide to walk instead.

✓ For example, if I'm waiting for a bus I can't wait for 10 or 15 minutes, but if it takes longer than that I will take a taxi or decide to walk instead.

The sentence contains a third person singular verb error: 'it's takes' is ungrammatical because 'it' should be followed by a single verb form 'takes' without 'is'. Remove the extra auxiliary 'is'. Also add the preposition 'for' after 'wait' and the article 'a' before 'taxi' to make the sentence natural and grammatical.

× So kinda.

✓ So, kind of.

'kinda' is informal and a contraction of 'kind of'. In spoken responses it's acceptable but for clearer grammar use 'kind of' and include a comma; this is a style/word choice adjustment rather than a strict tense error.

× I don't like living simple and boring life.

✓ I don't like living a simple and boring life.

The nouns requires an article: use 'a simple and boring life'. Without the article the adjective sequence is incorrectly attached to the noun. Adding 'a' corrects the noun phrase.

× I'm alive and kicking all day so I can't really tolerate waiting and sitting for hours or just standing and doing nothing makes me really mad so I try to move every time it makes me.

✓ I'm active all day, so I can't really tolerate waiting or sitting for hours; just standing and doing nothing makes me really mad, so I try to move whenever that happens.

The original has run-on structure and incorrect conjunctions leading to unclear clauses. 'Alive and kicking all day' is informal; 'active all day' is clearer. Use 'so' and punctuation to separate ideas. Replace 'every time it makes me' with 'whenever that happens' to correct pronoun reference and make the sentence grammatical.

× If I'm doing something for a long time, it takes time to achieve at some point.

✓ If I'm doing something for a long time, it will take time to achieve results at some point.

The phrase 'takes time to achieve' is awkward and missing an object. Adding 'results' clarifies the object. Using 'will' matches the idea of future consequence. Present participle usage is fine but the sentence needed an object and clearer tense.

× So you have to be patient and persistent to do that.

✓ So you have to be patient and persistent in order to do that.

'To do that' is not incorrect but 'in order to do that' is clearer and shows purpose. This fixes the sentence structure to express the reason clearly.

× So you have to be disciplined and prepared for that goal or ambition.

✓ So you have to be disciplined and prepared for that goal or ambition.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically; no correction necessary. Keeping it as is maintains meaning. (Included for completeness.)

× You have to be planned.

✓ You have to make a plan.

'Be planned' is not a natural English expression. Use the verb phrase 'make a plan' or 'be well planned' depending on meaning. 'Make a plan' corrects the structure.

× I'm not working right now.

✓ I'm not working right now.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate for the present situation; no change needed.

× I'm studying and I have a lot of lessons to pass.

✓ I'm studying and I have many lessons to pass.

'A lot of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate before plural countable noun 'lessons'. Both are acceptable in speech, but 'many' is more precise.

× So I have to study all of them regularly and I have to be plan having a weekly program for all of them be we have to.

✓ So I have to study all of them regularly, and I have to plan a weekly program for them.

The original contains multiple errors: 'have to be plan' is incorrect — use 'have to plan'; 'having a weekly program' needed rephrasing; remove the extraneous 'be we have to'. The corrected sentence uses proper verb forms and word order.

× I have been always a patient person.

✓ I have always been a patient person.

The adverb 'always' should be placed between 'have' and the past participle 'been' in the present perfect: 'have always been'. This corrects word order in present perfect tense.

× I remember that I was counting for summer like 6 months.

✓ I remember that I was counting down to summer for about six months.

Use 'counting down to' when referring to awaiting an event. 'Like 6 months' is informal; use 'about six months'. The preposition and phrase order needed correction.

× I was crossing the days every day and missing the summer and waiting for it.

✓ I used to mark off the days every day, missing the current time and waiting for summer.

'Crossing the days' is not idiomatic; 'mark off the days' or 'cross off the days' is correct. Clarify 'missing the summer' to 'missing the current time' or simplify to 'looking forward to summer'. Rephrase to improve idiomatic expression and sentence flow.

× It must be.

✓ That must be.

'It must be' is vague; 'That must be' better refers back to the situation. However, the meaning is unclear; likely the student intended 'I must have been' or 'That must be how I felt.' Choose 'That must be' for coherence.