机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构较为简单，且部分表达不够自然，例如“make fresh coffee by coffee maker”应改为“make fresh coffee with the coffee maker”。建议使用更多连接词使表达更连贯，同时丰富细节。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the coffee maker because I enjoy having a fresh cup of coffee every morning during breakfast. It is very convenient and helps me save money since making coffee at home is cheaper than buying it from shops. Moreover, it allows me to customize the strength and flavor according to my preference.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误，如“swapping machine”应为“sweeping machine”，且句子较为简单，缺少连接词。建议注意词汇准确性，使用连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑性，并丰富细节。

範例: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are essential in daily life because they help me complete household chores efficiently. For example, the washing machine cleans my clothes quickly, and the sweeping machine keeps the floors tidy. This saves me a lot of time, which I can spend with my family.

建議: 回答中存在语法和表达错误，如“expect a machine”不合适，应为“try a machine”。建议使用更准确的表达，并用连接词使句子更流畅，同时避免重复。

範例: I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine because I like to try it out first. However, if I find it difficult to operate or understand its functions, I will read the manual later to avoid mistakes.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，如“It's a bad memorize”应为“It's a bad experience”。建议注意时态和词汇的正确使用，表达更清晰，并用连接词使逻辑更连贯。

範例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because I once used machines without reading them and made mistakes that caused damage. That was a bad experience, so now I make sure to read the manual carefully before using any new machine.

× My favorite machine in my home is a coffee maker and I need to have a cup of coffee every morning when I eat breakfast.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is a coffee maker, and I need to have a cup of coffee every morning when I eat breakfast.

原句中缺少逗号，导致句子连接不够清晰。这里主要是标点符号问题，非语法错误。

× So this machine is really useful for me and also I can make fresh coffee by coffee maker much cheaper than I buy it in the shops.

✓ So this machine is really useful for me, and also I can make fresh coffee with the coffee maker much cheaper than buying it in the shops.

“by coffee maker”应改为“with the coffee maker”，表示使用某物。且“buy it”应改为“buying it”，因为前面是比较结构，动词应用动名词形式。

× Yes, both of them are really important in my daily life. As for me, washing machine and swapping machine help me a lot when I need to do some home chores.

✓ Yes, both of them are really important in my daily life. As for me, washing machines and sweeping machines help me a lot when I need to do some home chores.

“washing machine”和“swapping machine”应使用复数形式，因为前文提到的是“both of them”，指两个机器。且“swapping”应为“sweeping”，拼写错误。

× They can help me to wash clothes and clean my floor.

✓ They can help me wash clothes and clean my floor.

“help me to wash”中“to”可省略，英语中“help”后面接动词不定式时，“to”常省略，更自然。

× Very convenient and I also can save a lot of time to do other things like with my families.

✓ It is very convenient, and I can also save a lot of time to do other things like spending time with my family.

原句缺少主语，且“like with my families”表达不清，应补充完整且“families”应为“family”，表示家庭成员。

× I rarely read the instruction before using a machine.

✓ I rarely read the instructions before using a machine.

“instruction”应为复数形式“instructions”，表示说明书通常是多条指示。

× I am a very lazy person so I expect a machine at the first time.

✓ I am a very lazy person, so I expect a machine to work the first time.

“expect a machine at the first time”表达不正确，应改为“expect a machine to work the first time”，表示期望机器第一次就能用。

× If I have some difficult with how to use it or the functions of it, I will read the instruction later.

✓ If I have some difficulty with how to use it or its functions, I will read the instructions later.

“difficult”应为名词“difficulty”，且“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，“functions of it”改为“its functions”更自然。

× Yes, I agree with it because I used to use many machines without reading instructions, so I made some mistakes when I use the functions with incorrect way.

✓ Yes, I agree with it because I used to use many machines without reading instructions, so I made some mistakes when I used the functions in an incorrect way.

“when I use”应为过去时“when I used”，因为前文是过去时态。

× After that the machine was broken by me.

✓ After that, the machine was broken by me.

句子语法正确，但加逗号更符合书面表达习惯。

× It's a bad memorize I think, so I will read it after.

✓ It's a bad memory, I think, so I will read it afterwards.

“memorize”是动词，应改为名词“memory”。“after”应改为副词“afterwards”，表示“之后”。