机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 문법적 정확성을 높이기 위해 연습하세요.

範例: My favourite machine at home is my desktop computer because I enjoy playing various computer games on it.

建議: 답변에 불필요한 중복과 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 명확한 주제문을 사용하고, 연결어를 활용해 논리적으로 답변을 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in modern society because they make household chores much more convenient and save a lot of time.

建議: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 명확한 이유를 제시하고, 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습을 하세요.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to use it properly and safely.

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많습니다. 이유를 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I believe reading the instructions is important because it prevents mistakes and ensures that people use machines safely and correctly.

× One of the my favorite machine is maybe desktop because I can play some computer games.

✓ One of my favorite machines is maybe the desktop because I can play some computer games.

'The' is needed before 'my favorite machine' to specify the noun, and 'machine' should be plural 'machines' because 'one of' refers to a member of a group. Also, 'desktop' should be preceded by 'the' as it refers to a specific machine.

× To desktop, so I love to.

✓ I love the desktop.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It should be restructured to a complete sentence expressing the student's preference.

× they, uh, really important to important in modern society because they can make people more convenient in household works.

✓ they are really important in modern society because they can make household work more convenient for people.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' to link the subject and adjective. 'Important to important' is redundant and incorrect. 'Household works' should be 'household work' as 'work' is uncountable here. Also, 'make people more convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'make household work more convenient for people.'

× So, uh, this is umm, revolution, uh, in society.

✓ So, uh, this is a revolution in society.

The noun 'revolution' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× Yes, because I don't know exact using way.

✓ Yes, because I don't know the exact way to use it.

The phrase 'exact using way' is incorrect. It should be 'the exact way to use it' to correctly express the meaning. Also, 'the' is needed before 'exact way'.

× So I I should read the instructions because I'm more use well that the instruction makes me more knowing about that machine.

✓ So I should read the instructions because they help me use the machine better and understand it more.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It needs restructuring to express that reading instructions helps the student use and understand the machine better.

× Yes, because we don't need the instructions, we have some mistakes to use them.

✓ Yes, because if we don't read the instructions, we might make some mistakes when using them.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'don't need' instead of 'don't read' and lacks clarity. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun usage.

× So I I think it's important to read the instructions because it makes people more safety and correct using the machine.

✓ So I think it's important to read the instructions because it makes people safer and helps them use the machine correctly.

'More safety' is incorrect; the correct comparative adjective is 'safer.' Also, 'correct using the machine' should be 'use the machine correctly' to use the adverb form properly.