机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语言不够自然，有语法和表达错误，且内容重复。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使用更准确的词汇表达观点。

範例: My favourite machine at home is my computer because it helps me finish assignments efficiently. Moreover, it has a large screen, which allows me to watch movies comfortably while working.

建議: 回答内容混乱，表达不清晰，语法错误较多。建议先理清思路，使用简单句表达观点，并且避免语音错误。

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us clean clothes and floors quickly and effectively, saving a lot of time and effort.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免重复，并注意语法准确。

範例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because they teach me how to operate it properly and safely.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用正确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I believe it is important to read instructions carefully because if you don't, you might damage the machine and it won't work anymore.

× I would say it's my computers because it's helped me to finish the assignment effectively and our computer brings a lot of benefit, like it's carrying out a big screen on my desk so I can watch the movie and do the assignment.

✓ I would say it's my computer because it has helped me to finish the assignment effectively and our computer brings a lot of benefits, like it has a big screen on my desk so I can watch movies and do the assignment.

这里“computers”应为单数“computer”，因为后文指的是一台电脑。动词“it's helped”应改为“it has helped”，符合现在完成时。benefit应为复数“benefits”，表示多种好处。"it's carrying out a big screen"表达不准确，改为“it has a big screen”更合适。movie应为复数“movies”，表示泛指。

× Weevils are fair to change, uh, at home because we're expecting it was expecting machine help to clean the plant and washing machine have to, uh, clean the clothes very effectively.

✓ Washing machines are fair to change at home because we're expecting machines to help clean the plants and washing machines have to clean the clothes very effectively.

“Weevils”应为“washing machines”，且应使用复数形式。动词“have to”应与复数主语“washing machines”一致。plant应为复数“plants”，表示多株植物。

× So I think it's very important and I can no no longer manipulate to clean the ground or wash the.

✓ So I think it's very important and I can no longer manage to clean the ground or wash the clothes.

“manipulate”用词不当，应为“manage”，表示“能够做某事”。“wash the”后缺少宾语，应补充“clothes”。

× I normally will read the instructions before I use the machines because I think it is very important to watch the instructions because it gives the effective way to teach you how to use the machines more effectively.

✓ I normally read the instructions before I use the machines because I think it is very important to read the instructions as they provide an effective way to teach you how to use the machines more effectively.

“watch the instructions”用词错误，应为“read the instructions”。“gives the effective way to teach you”表达不自然，改为“provide an effective way to teach you”更准确。

× So I think we carefully about instruction is very important.

✓ So I think being careful about instructions is very important.

“we carefully about instruction”结构错误，应改为“being careful about instructions”，使句子结构完整且语义清晰。

× Yeah, yes, definitely. I think read the restructuring carefully can give a reveal that you ultimately learn by using machines which if you don't read carefully about the instruction, the machine will get damaged definitely and then you no longer use this machine again.

✓ Yeah, yes, definitely. I think reading the instructions carefully can help you ultimately learn how to use machines. If you don't read the instructions carefully, the machine will definitely get damaged and then you will no longer be able to use it again.

“read the restructuring”应为“reading the instructions”。“can give a reveal”表达错误，应为“can help you learn”。句子结构混乱，需拆分为两句。缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整。