机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более естественным и завершённым. Следует избегать грамматических ошибок и избыточности, а также добавить связующие слова для логичности. Например, можно начать с прямого ответа, затем объяснить причину и добавить конкретный пример.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher. I was very happy when my parents bought it because it saves me a lot of time. For example, instead of washing dishes by hand, I can focus on other tasks or relax.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать связующие слова для плавности и конкретизировать преимущества. Также важно избегать повторов и неясных слов.

範例: Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. They save a lot of time and clean more effectively than doing these tasks manually. Therefore, having these machines makes homes more modern and convenient.

建議: Ответ звучит неестественно и содержит ошибки. Следует отвечать более прямо, использовать связующие слова и объяснять причину более чётко и грамотно.

範例: Usually, I don't read the instructions before using a machine because my mom has already read them and made sure everything is fine. However, if I face any problems, I would check the manual.

建議: Ответ не завершён и содержит много ошибок. Нужно строить предложения логично, использовать связующие слова и конкретизировать мысли, избегая незавершённых фраз.

範例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions. Although many people believe they know how to use machines, instructions can provide useful rules and prevent common problems.

× Actually, there are various types of machines in our home, so my favorite machine is dishwasher.

✓ Actually, there are various types of machines in our home, so my favorite machine is the dishwasher.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'dishwasher' because it refers to a specific machine that is the favorite. Without 'the', the sentence sounds incomplete or incorrect.

× I was happy when my parents decided to buy this kind of machine because I can easily earn my own time without.

✓ I was happy when my parents decided to buy this kind of machine because I can easily save my own time now.

The phrase 'earn my own time without' is incorrect. The correct modal verb usage here is 'can easily save my own time'. 'Earn time' is not idiomatic; 'save time' is the proper expression.

× I think there are a lot of benefits such as saving the time and then maybe washing dishes more clear than it hand made washing.

✓ I think there are a lot of benefits such as saving time and maybe washing dishes more clearly than hand washing.

The article 'the' before 'time' is unnecessary here. Also, 'more clear' should be 'more clearly' because it modifies the verb 'washing'. 'It hand made washing' is incorrect and should be 'hand washing'.

× So it's really good to have this kind of lashes in every house like to be more modern.

✓ So it's really good to have this kind of appliance in every house to be more modern.

The word 'lashes' is incorrect here; it should be 'appliance' or 'machine'. Also, the phrase 'like to be more modern' is awkward and should be 'to be more modern'. The pronoun usage and word choice need correction.

× Mostly no, not so really.

✓ Mostly no, not really.

The phrase 'not so really' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'not really' to indicate a negative response.

× I don't prefer to read some instructions before using a machine because my mom already read this kind of paper and also make sure that it's everything OK.

✓ I don't prefer to read instructions before using a machine because my mom already read them and also made sure that everything is OK.

The pronoun 'this kind of paper' is awkward; 'instructions' is better. Also, verb agreement is needed: 'make sure' should be 'made sure'. 'It's everything OK' should be 'everything is OK'.

× Most people think that they are good at machines, but there are some exceptions and maybe rules that can be really helpful when using this machine and a majority of people tend to face some problems such as not.

✓ Most people think that they are good at using machines, but there are some exceptions and rules that can be really helpful when using this machine, and a majority of people tend to face some problems.

The phrase 'good at machines' is incorrect; it should be 'good at using machines'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'such as not', which is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Also, the sentence structure needs improvement for clarity.