机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "the this for sure." Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

範例: My favorite machine at home is the dishwasher because washing dishes by hand is tedious. For example, food particles often stick to plates and cups, making them hard to clean if left too long.

建議: Your answer is conversational but could be more structured. Start with a clear opinion, then support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like "uh" and clarify terms for better coherence.

範例: I believe washing machines are more important than sweeping machines because washing clothes is time-consuming. Although I can sweep floors easily while listening to music, washing clothes requires more effort and time.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid vague phrases like "on somewhere." Try to organize your answer with a topic sentence and supporting details.

範例: I usually don't read instructions before using a machine because I find them unnecessary. Instead, if I have trouble, I watch short tutorials on YouTube to learn how to operate the device effectively.

建議: Your answer lacks coherence and contains informal expressions like "stomped it away." Try to express your opinion clearly with proper linking words and avoid slang. Also, correct grammar mistakes and clarify your points.

範例: Although I rarely read instructions because I find them unhelpful, I understand their importance. Manufacturers include them to ensure customers know how to use products safely and correctly.

× my favorite should be the this for sure because washing dishes and cups are always a tedious task

✓ my favorite should be this for sure because washing dishes and cups are always a tedious task

The phrase 'the this' is incorrect because 'this' already functions as a demonstrative determiner and does not require the definite article 'the' before it. Using both together is redundant and ungrammatical. The correct form is simply 'this.'

× especially when they are staying there for a long time with food particles in them which get moldy and gross after time

✓ especially when they stay there for a long time with food particles in them which get moldy and gross over time

The verb 'stay' is more appropriate than 'are staying' in this context because it describes a habitual or general situation rather than a continuous action. Also, the phrase 'after time' is awkward; the correct preposition is 'over time' to indicate gradual change.

× I think washing machine is way more, uh, useful than just a supermachine

✓ I think the washing machine is way more, uh, useful than just a supermachine

When referring to a specific type of machine in general, the definite article 'the' is required before 'washing machine.' Omitting 'the' here is incorrect because it makes the noun phrase sound incomplete or ungrammatical.

× I tend to just see a YouTube short or a tutorial on somewhere to fully understand how it works

✓ I tend to just watch a YouTube short or a tutorial somewhere to fully understand how it works

The verb 'see' is not the best choice when referring to watching videos; 'watch' is more appropriate. Also, the preposition 'on' before 'somewhere' is incorrect; 'somewhere' does not require a preposition here. The phrase should be 'watch ... somewhere.'

× the manufacturer doesn't want people customers to be not know how to use the product

✓ the manufacturer doesn't want customers to not know how to use the product

The phrase 'people customers' is redundant; 'customers' alone suffices. Also, the construction 'to be not know' is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'to not know.' This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.