机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答比较自然，但表达略显口语化且有些不完整。建议使用更正式的表达方式，避免缩写和口语词汇，同时增加连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I find it difficult to wash heavy clothes like coats and jackets by hand, especially during winter.

建議: 回答简短且缺乏细节，建议增加具体原因和例子，并使用连接词使回答更连贯。

範例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time on household chores, allowing us to focus on more important tasks like work or study.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用完整句子，避免口语填充词，并提供更具体的细节。

範例: I sometimes read the instructions, especially when I use a machine for the first time. For example, I recently bought an air fryer, which is quite advanced, so I read the manual carefully.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的语法结构，明确表达观点，并举例说明。

範例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because it helps prevent mistakes and can extend the machine's lifespan by ensuring proper use.

× It must be the washing machine 'cause I'm too lazy to wash it by myself, especially during the winter time.

✓ It must be the washing machine 'cause I'm too lazy to wash clothes by myself, especially during the winter time.

这里的错误是动词后缺少宾语，'wash it'中的'it'指代不明确，应该明确指代'clothes'。建议补充具体宾语，使句子更清晰。

× Like my coat and my jackets are too heavy to wash by hands.

✓ Like my coat and my jackets are too heavy to wash by hand.

短语中'by hands'应为固定搭配'by hand'，表示用手洗。'hands'复数形式不符合习惯用法。

× Because they save lots of time for us from doing chores.

✓ Because they save us lots of time from doing chores.

介词短语位置错误，正确表达应为'save us lots of time'，即节省我们的时间。原句结构不完整，导致表达不清。

× Sometimes yes, but only for the machine that I have never used that before, for example, an air fryer pan.

✓ Sometimes yes, but only for machines that I have never used before, for example, an air fryer pan.

'machine'应使用复数形式'machines'，因为泛指多种机器；'that'重复使用冗余，应删除一个；'have never used'是现在完成时，正确。

× Uh, it's a quite a advanced machine and just invested in recent year.

✓ Uh, it's quite an advanced machine and was just invested in recent years.

'a quite a'结构错误，应为'quite an'；'advanced'前用'an'因为以元音音素开头；'just invested'缺少被动语态助动词'was'；'recent year'应为复数'recent years'。

× Yes, definitely, because reading an instruction can reduce the risk to make mistake and reading the response for one machine may be can extend the life of that machine.

✓ Yes, definitely, because reading instructions can reduce the risk of making mistakes and reading the response for a machine may also extend its life.

'instruction'应为复数形式'instructions'；'reduce the risk to make mistake'应改为'reduce the risk of making mistakes'，动名词形式更合适；'may be can'重复，应删去一个；'one machine'改为'a machine'更自然；'the life of that machine'改为'its life'更简洁。