机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的地方，比如“fluid machine”应为“favorite machine”，以及句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接表达观点，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator in the kitchen because it keeps my drinks cold, especially during summer. Also, it helps me store fresh fruits and food, preventing them from spoiling.

建議: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误，如“someone can use uses it”和“invest invest”。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: Of course, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us finish housework quickly. As a result, we have more time to enjoy our hobbies and interests.

建議: 回答中词汇使用不当，如“instructor”应为“instructions”，“mandate”用词错误。句子结构混乱，建议简化表达，使用正确词汇，并保持句子连贯。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using a machine because it helps me understand how to use and maintain it properly, preventing damage.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和不连贯的表达，如“and we can expose some potential functions”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子衔接。

範例: Yes, I believe reading the instructions is very important because it helps us understand how to use the machine properly. Moreover, we can learn about some additional features that we might not know otherwise.

× I think my fluid machine in my room is a refrigerator in the catering room because it can provide me some cold drinks, especially in summer.

✓ I think my favorite machine in my home is the refrigerator in the catering room because it can provide me with some cold drinks, especially in summer.

原句中“fluid machine”用词不当，应改为“favorite machine”更符合语境；另外，动词“provide”后应加介词“with”表示提供某物。

× I think my fluid machine in my room is a refrigerator in the catering room because it can provide me some cold drinks, especially in summer.

✓ I think my favorite machine in my home is the refrigerator in the catering room because it can provide me with some cold drinks, especially in summer.

动词“provide”后应接介词“with”，表示“提供给某人某物”，缺少介词导致表达不完整。

× What is more, I think I can put some fresh fruits and food inside it, which can make it not expired.

✓ What is more, I think I can put some fresh fruits and food inside it, which can keep them from expiring.

原句中“which can make it not expired”结构不正确，应改为“which can keep them from expiring”，使表达更自然且语法正确。

× Of course, I think both of them are equally important for me because in individual family someone can use uses it to do a lot of housework and chores which can save our time and we can use more time to invest invest our hobbies or interests.

✓ Of course, I think both of them are equally important for me because in an individual family someone can use them to do a lot of housework and chores which can save our time and we can use more time to invest in our hobbies or interests.

“someone can use uses it”中动词重复且主谓不一致，应改为“someone can use them”；“invest invest”重复，应去掉一个“invest”；“invest our hobbies”应加介词“in”，即“invest in our hobbies”。

× Of course, I think both of them are equally important for me because in individual family someone can use uses it to do a lot of housework and chores which can save our time and we can use more time to invest invest our hobbies or interests.

✓ Of course, I think both of them are equally important for me because in an individual family someone can use them to do a lot of housework and chores which can save our time and we can use more time to invest in our hobbies or interests.

“in individual family”缺少冠词，应为“in an individual family”；“invest our hobbies”应为“invest in our hobbies”，介词使用错误。

× Of course, before using such machines, I will read the instructor of it carefully and if you pay much attention to its usage and how to protect it, not to be spoiled.

✓ Of course, before using such machines, I will read the instructions carefully and pay much attention to their usage and how to protect them from being spoiled.

“instructor”应为“instructions”；“of it”不合适，应直接用复数“instructions”；“if you pay”主语不一致，应统一为“I”；“how to protect it, not to be spoiled”表达不完整，应改为“how to protect them from being spoiled”。

× Yes, because a mandate is a complex thing for some for me sometimes.

✓ Yes, because a machine is a complex thing for me sometimes.

“mandate”用词错误，应为“machine”；“for some for me sometimes”结构混乱，应简化为“for me sometimes”。

× Of course, I think it's very important for us to read the instruction first, because we can know the machine's usage.

✓ Of course, I think it's very important for us to read the instructions first, because we can know the machine's usage.

“instruction”应使用复数形式“instructions”，表示说明书的内容。

× What is more, and we can expose some potential functions or extra functions of the machine.

✓ What is more, we can discover some potential or extra functions of the machine.

“What is more, and we can”中“and”多余，应去掉；“expose”用词不当，应改为“discover”。