机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and finish sentences fully. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid fillers like "like" and incomplete thoughts. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use "printer" and "documents"/"assignments").

範例: My favourite machine at home is my printer. It helps me print resumes and assignments quickly, which is essential when I have tight deadlines. For example, I often print project reports and posters to decorate my study area.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide two clear, specific reasons connected with linking words. Remove repetition and finish the sentence logically. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "vacuum cleaners" instead of "sweeping machines").

範例: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important. They save a lot of time and physical effort, so I can focus on studying, and they keep the home consistently clean, which improves hygiene and comfort.

建議: Keep the response structured: clear topic sentence, then one or two specific methods you use (reading manual, watching tutorials) with a reason. Avoid redundancy like "whole instruction" and tighten phrasing.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new device. I also watch online tutorials or check reviews so I can use it efficiently and avoid mistakes, especially for electronics with complex settings.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and one concrete example with a full explanation. Avoid trailing off and filler words. Use linked reasoning to explain consequences of not reading instructions.

範例: Yes, it is essential to read instructions before using a device. For instance, washing machine manuals often warn against washing silk items on certain cycles; ignoring this can damage clothes or the machine, so following instructions prevents costly mistakes.

× So as a student I really like to use my printing machine.

✓ As a student, I really like using my printer.

Use of 'to use' is not wrong but 'like using' (verb + -ing) is more natural when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Also 'printing machine' is unnatural; 'printer' is the correct noun. Add a comma after introductory phrase for clarity.

× I feel like whenever I want to print some resumes or assignments, it really helps me a lot during my assignment work or homework and also if I want to like decorate anything or if I want.

✓ I find that whenever I need to print resumes or assignments, the printer helps me a lot with my coursework and homework; I also use it when I want to print decorations or similar items.

Original is repetitive and incomplete ('or if I want' unfinished). Restructure sentence to remove filler 'I feel like' and 'like', use consistent verbs ('print' not 'to print some') and specify uses. This improves clarity and grammatical completeness.

× Washing machines and sweeping machines not only saves your time, it saves your energy and it also makes your house clean and tidy all the time whenever.

✓ Washing machines and sweepers not only save you time, they save your energy and also keep your house clean and tidy.

Subject 'Washing machines and sweepers' is plural so verb should be 'save' not 'saves'. Use 'you' instead of 'your time' for natural phrasing, and 'keep' is better than 'makes' when describing maintaining cleanliness. Remove redundant 'all the time whenever'.

× I feel yes and I prefer using both in my house.

✓ Yes, I think so, and I prefer using both at my home.

Replace 'I feel yes' with 'Yes, I think so' for natural speech. 'Using both in my house' is acceptable but 'at my home' or 'in my house' both okay; 'using' is the correct verb + -ing form after 'prefer'.

× If I'm buying anything, before buying I would read the whole instruction or just Google it or YouTube it just to confirm how to use it efficiently so that I can get a most out of it and do not make any mistake.

✓ If I'm buying anything, before I buy it I read the whole instructions or just Google or watch a YouTube video to confirm how to use it efficiently so that I can get the most out of it and avoid making mistakes.

Use consistent tense: present simple for habitual action ('I read') rather than conditional 'would read'. 'Instructions' plural is more natural. 'YouTube it' is informal; 'watch a YouTube video' is clearer. Use 'the most' and 'avoid making mistakes' to correct phrasing and verb forms.

× Definitely it is a must that everyone should do before buying any device.

✓ Definitely, it is a must that everyone does this before buying any device.

Original mixes modal 'should' with 'is a must' awkwardly. Use present simple 'does' after 'everyone' to indicate the required action. Comma after 'Definitely' improves clarity.

× So if there is any like instruction not to use it, for example in washing machines there is it and that you cannot put silk clothes so it makes you.

✓ So if there is any instruction saying not to use it, for example on washing machines that you cannot put silk clothes in them, you should follow it.

Original has pronoun reference errors and is unclear ('there is it and that you cannot put silk clothes so it makes you' is ungrammatical). Clarify 'instruction saying' and use correct preposition 'in them' for silk clothes in washing machines. End with a clear recommendation 'you should follow it'.