机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise, and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove hesitations. For example, say you use it because it saves time and needs little oil, and give a short example of a dish you cook in it.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the air fryer. I use it because it cooks food quickly and needs very little oil, which makes meals healthier. For example, I often make crispy chicken and roasted vegetables in it, and it takes only 20 minutes.

建議: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words for clarity. Fix grammar (plural/singular, relative clauses) and be more specific about how they help (examples, time saved). Avoid repeating ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important. They remove dust and dirt that can harm our health, and they save a lot of time compared with washing or sweeping by hand. For example, a washing machine can clean a full load in under an hour, freeing time for other tasks.

建議: Start with a direct yes/no, then add a clear reason with correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about what you look for in instructions (safety warnings, operating steps) and give a brief example. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'only know the machine'.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they explain the correct operating steps and safety warnings. For instance, when I got a new blender I checked the manual to learn how to assemble it and which parts are not dishwasher-safe.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid fillers. Use correct noun forms and cohesive linking words (for example, however, because). Provide a concrete consequence or example to support your view. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because even familiar machines can be dangerous if used incorrectly. For example, reading the manual for a pressure cooker prevents accidents by explaining safe sealing and release procedures.

× My favorite machine in my home is air fryer.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is an air fryer.

Missing indefinite article before a singular countable noun. 'Air fryer' is a singular countable noun and requires 'an' because it begins with a vowel sound. Improve by adding 'a' or 'an' appropriately: 'an air fryer'.

× Actually I didn't good at cooking so air frying is very helpful.

✓ Actually I'm not good at cooking, so air frying is very helpful.

Incorrect tense and verb form: 'didn't good' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'I'm not good' to describe a general ability. Also add a comma before the result clause. Suggestion: use 'I'm not good at cooking' for current state.

× It's it's handled very easily without any techniques I just need to put in and without any oils or just little oils.

✓ It's handled very easily without any special technique; I just need to put the food in with no oil or just a little oil.

Awkward structure and incorrect noun forms. 'Handled' is fine as passive but repetition 'It's it's' and 'techniques' should be singular 'technique' or 'special techniques'. Also 'without any oils' should be 'with no oil' or 'a little oil'. Clarify object 'the food'. Use semicolon or separate clauses for clarity.

× Was that foods?

✓ Are those foods?

Incorrect question form and number agreement. 'Was' (past singular) is wrong for asking about plural items now. Use present 'Are' and plural 'those' to match 'foods' (though 'food' is usually uncountable; better 'Is that food?' or 'Are those food items?'). Suggestion: 'Is that food?' if referring to a single item, or 'Are those food items?' for plural.

× Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they remove dust, dirt which is affect our health directly and they also save a lot of time and effort compared with doing everything by our hand.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important because they remove dust and dirt, which directly affect our health, and they also save a lot of time and effort compared with doing everything by hand.

Multiple issues: wrong device name 'sweeping machines' -> 'vacuum cleaners' (word choice), missing commas and relative pronoun placement. 'which is affect' has wrong verb form and subject-verb agreement; should be 'which directly affect'. Preposition 'by our hand' is incorrect; use 'by hand'. Also 'dust, dirt' should be 'dust and dirt'.

× Yes, I always read the instruction before using a machine because only know the machine very clearly, I can use it very well and the instruction can protect us from unnecessary danger if we don't know the machine.

✓ Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because only if I know the machine very clearly can I use it well, and the instructions can protect us from unnecessary danger if we don't know the machine.

Several errors: 'read the instruction' should be plural 'instructions' or 'the instruction manual'. Missing conjunction and inverted word order in conditional 'only if I know... can I'. 'I can use it very well' -> 'use it well' is more natural. 'the instruction' -> 'the instructions'. Improve by using conditional structure and plural nouns.

× Yes, I think it's pretty mature to read the instruction.

✓ Yes, I think it's pretty important to read the instructions.

'Mature' is incorrect word choice; 'important' fits meaning. 'the instruction' should be plural 'instructions' or 'the instruction manual'. Use 'important' to express necessity.

× Uh, because on familiar machines can be dangerous if you use it incorrectly.

✓ Uh, because even familiar machines can be dangerous if you use them incorrectly.

'on familiar' is incorrect preposition and word; should be 'even familiar'. Also subject 'machines' is plural so pronoun should be 'them', not 'it'. Ensure agreement and correct adverb placement.

× Instruction always tell us the correct steps and any safety precautions to avoid problems.

✓ Instructions always tell us the correct steps and any safety precautions to avoid problems.

Subject-verb agreement and article number: 'Instruction' (singular) with plural verb 'tell' is wrong. Use plural 'Instructions' to agree with 'tell'. Alternatively, 'The instruction always tells us' would also be correct. Use consistent singular/plural.