机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Correct subject-verb agreement (e.g., “I like” not “I likes”), and simplify phrases (e.g., “I’m a working woman, so I don’t do laundry during the week”). Use a linking word to connect the reason.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time. As a working woman, I usually do laundry only on weekends, so the machine makes household chores much easier.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a specific example. Improve grammar (plural forms and verb forms) and use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid vague phrases like “then they use.”

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important because many people work full-time. For example, someone who works five days a week can use these machines to clean quickly in the evenings or at weekends.

建議: Keep the response concise and correct repetitions. State the main idea, then one specific benefit. Fix grammar and word order (e.g., “read the instructions” plural; “it helps me use the machine correctly”).

範例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me use it correctly. For example, the manual tells me which settings to choose and how to avoid common mistakes, so I save time.

建議: Give a clear, single topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Use correct forms (“instructions,” “the proper way,” “prevent damage”) and linking words like “because” and “for example.”

範例: Yes, reading the instructions is important because it prevents damage and saves time. For example, the manual explains proper use and cleaning methods, which helps the machine last longer.

× My favorite machine in my home is the washing machine which I likes too much because it makes my work easier for washing the clothes.

✓ My favorite machine at home is the washing machine, which I like very much because it makes washing clothes easier.

The verb 'like' should be used in third person singular: 'likes' is incorrect after 'I'. Also other fixes: use 'at home' and cleaner word order: 'makes washing clothes easier' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'I like' for first person and simplify noun phrases.

× I am a working woman that is the reason I don't wash the clothes daily, so I use it on the weekends.

✓ I am a working woman, so I don't wash clothes daily; I use it on the weekends.

The clause 'that is the reason' is wordy and awkward. Also 'the clothes' is unnecessary; use 'clothes' generally. Combine clauses with 'so' or a semicolon for clearer structure. Suggestion: use concise connectors like 'so' and omit unnecessary articles.

× Yes, I think washing machine and sweeping machines are very important in our day-to-day life because nowadays there is a hectic schedule for the people who working five days in a week, then they use the machine and sweeping machine for clean.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum sweepers are very important in our day-to-day lives because many people have hectic schedules working five days a week, so they use these machines to clean.

Use plural 'washing machines' to match general reference. 'Sweeping machines' is odd; 'vacuum sweepers' or 'vacuum cleaners' is better. 'People who working' lacks auxiliary verb; use 'people who work'. 'For clean' is incorrect; use 'to clean'. Also 'day-to-day lives' plural matches 'people'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb presence and correct plural forms.

× Yes, I usually read the instruction before using a machine.

✓ Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine.

Use plural 'instructions' because manuals/instruction leaflets are countable and typically plural. Also 'read the instruction' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: prefer 'instructions' or 'the instructions' when referring to the manual.

× It makes me it helps me to easy to use the machine rather than wasting my time to how I use so I can read that manual which helps me to easily use that machine.

✓ It helps me learn how to use the machine easily, so I don't waste time; I can read the manual to use the machine correctly.

Original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical: 'It makes me it helps me to easy to use' is incorrect. Use a clear structure: 'It helps me learn how to use the machine easily' and 'so I don't waste time'. Also 'read that manual' -> 'read the manual'. Suggestion: break long thoughts into shorter clauses and use verbs like 'learn' and 'use' correctly.

× Yes, I think it is important to read the instruction because it saves our time.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because they save us time.

Use plural 'instructions' and match pronouns: 'they save us time' rather than 'it saves our time'. 'Our time' is acceptable but 'us time' with 'they' is more natural. Suggestion: ensure pronoun-antecedent agreement and pluralization.

× It helps me to how we, it helps us to how we use that machine in proper way that it's not any damage to that machine and how we and what's the ways to clean for that machine, clean that machine.

✓ It helps us understand how to use the machine properly so it does not get damaged, and it explains how to clean the machine.

Sentence had mixed pronouns 'me' and 'we' and awkward phrasing 'to how we'. Use consistent plural 'us' for general statements. 'Proper way' should be 'properly'. 'It's not any damage to that machine' should be 'so it does not get damaged'. 'What's the ways to clean for that machine' -> 'explains how to clean the machine'. Suggestion: maintain pronoun consistency and use standard verb patterns: 'understand how to' and 'so it does not get damaged'.