记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi lặp từ và thiếu sự mạch lạc. Bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ ngữ và sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng hơn để trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

範例: I'm not very good at memorising things, so I usually write down important information in a small notebook to help me remember.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I once forgot an important revision class scheduled by my teacher, and as a result, I was the only one absent and scored lower than my classmates.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi mơ hồ và thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: In my daily life, I need to remember important deadlines for work or school. Besides that, I also try to schedule some rest time because I often feel very tired after a busy day.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lặp lại, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng nhiều từ ngắt quãng như 'uh' và sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually take notes to remember important things. Occasionally, I set alarms for events to keep track of my schedule, although sometimes the alarm sound is too loud and makes me feel dizzy.

× Actually I do forget a lot of important events, so every every time I need to remember something I always take a small note with me.

✓ Actually I do forget a lot of important events, so every time I need to remember something I always take a small note with me.

The phrase 'every every time' contains a repetition error. It should be 'every time' to correctly express frequency. This is a singular/plural issue because 'every' is used with singular nouns or time expressions, and repetition is unnecessary and incorrect.

× Like, uh, for example, there are the times that my teacher used to schedule a times to, uh, make a revision for my class and uh, I just, uh, the only ones that absence and uh, end up scoring lower than the other.

✓ Like, uh, for example, there were times that my teacher used to schedule times to, uh, make a revision for my class and, uh, I was the only one who was absent and, uh, ended up scoring lower than the others.

The sentence has multiple singular/plural issues: 'there are the times' should be 'there were times' to match past tense and plural noun; 'a times' is incorrect because 'times' is plural and should not have 'a'; 'the only ones that absence' should be 'the only one who was absent' to match singular subject and correct verb form; 'than the other' should be 'than the others' to compare with plural group.

× Like, uh, for example, there are the times that my teacher used to schedule a times to, uh, make a revision for my class and uh, I just, uh, the only ones that absence and uh, end up scoring lower than the other.

✓ Like, uh, for example, there were times that my teacher used to schedule times to, uh, make a revision for my class and, uh, I was the only one who was absent and, uh, ended up scoring lower than the others.

The sentence describes past events, so verbs should be in past tense: 'are' should be 'were'; 'end up' should be 'ended up'; 'absence' is a noun, but the verb 'was absent' is needed here.

× Probably sometimes when I need to go for a deadline also, but I think that I will also schedule for a rest because I'm always too tired when working a lot in the day.

✓ Probably sometimes when I need to meet a deadline also, but I think that I will also schedule some rest because I'm always too tired when working a lot during the day.

'Go for a deadline' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'meet a deadline'. Also, 'schedule for a rest' is incorrect; it should be 'schedule some rest' or 'schedule a rest'. 'In the day' is better expressed as 'during the day'. These are singular/plural and preposition usage issues.

× Probably sometimes when I need to go for a deadline also, but I think that I will also schedule for a rest because I'm always too tired when working a lot in the day.

✓ Probably sometimes when I need to meet a deadline also, but I think that I will also schedule some rest because I'm always too tired when working a lot during the day.

The preposition 'for' after 'schedule' is incorrect; 'schedule some rest' is correct. Also, 'in the day' should be 'during the day' to correctly express time.

× I always take a lot of notes when I'm used to, uh, remember the things that, uh, I need to, but, uh, However, once in the blue moon, I also, uh, set an alarm for the events so that I could follow up my schedule, but, uh, the alarm is just too loud and, uh, get me dizzy sometimes.

✓ I always take a lot of notes when I need to remember the things that I need to, but, however, once in a blue moon, I also set an alarm for events so that I can follow up on my schedule, but the alarm is just too loud and sometimes makes me dizzy.

'I'm used to remember' is incorrect; it should be 'I need to remember'. 'Once in the blue moon' should be 'once in a blue moon'. 'Set an alarm for the events' should be 'set an alarm for events' (no 'the'). 'Follow up my schedule' should be 'follow up on my schedule'. 'Get me dizzy' should be 'makes me dizzy'. These are preposition and verb usage errors.