记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，有语法错误和重复，且句子较长且不够连贯。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For instance, I often forget where I put my keys or notebook. Also, I find it hard to remember people's birthdays, like my best friend's birthday, which sometimes upsets her.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子冗长且不连贯。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意时态和语法，避免重复。

範例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday, which is on May 29. She was very upset and didn't talk to me for a month. It made me feel really bad.

建議: 回答不完整且缺乏具体细节，句子结构不完整。建议完整表达观点，提供具体例子，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

範例: In daily life, I need to remember important things like my phone number, passwords, and my friends' birthdays. These are essential because they help me stay connected and organized.

建議: 回答较为自然，但有重复和语法错误。建议减少口头语，注意语法准确性，并用更清晰的表达方式。

範例: I usually write important things in my notebook, and sometimes I save them on my phone. I check these notes daily to make sure I don't forget, like where I parked my car or where I put my keys.

× I constantly forget my keys or my notebook elsewhere that I can not really find

✓ I constantly forget my keys or my notebook somewhere else that I cannot really find

这里的 'elsewhere' 用法不当，应该用 'somewhere else' 表示“别的地方”。此外，'can not' 应写作一个词 'cannot'。

× I think it is so hard for me to memorize somebody's birthday

✓ I think it is very hard for me to memorize somebody's birthday

'so hard' 在这里用法不太自然，改为 'very hard' 更符合英语表达习惯。

× I always forget my bestest birthday and which made her really angry

✓ I always forget my best friend's birthday, which makes her really angry

'bestest' 是非标准用法，应改为 'best friend'。此外，句子结构不完整，'which made her really angry' 应改为 'which makes her really angry'，保持时态一致。

× I forget, I forgot my best friend's birthday, uh, which supposed to be at May 29

✓ I forgot my best friend's birthday, which was supposed to be on May 29

这里时态应统一为过去时，'forget' 改为 'forgot'。'supposed to be at May 29' 中介词错误，应为 'on May 29'。

× which supposed to be at May 29

✓ which was supposed to be on May 29

日期前应使用介词 'on'，而不是 'at'。

× she was really mad at me and she stopped speaking to me for at least a month

✓ she was really mad at me and she stopped speaking to me for at least a month

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× which makes me really crazy because I can

✓ which made me really upset because I couldn't do anything

'makes me really crazy' 用词不当，改为 'made me really upset' 更合适。'because I can' 不完整，应补充完整表达。

× people always need to remember anything important in their daily life

✓ people always need to remember important things in their daily life

'anything' 用法不当，否定或疑问句中使用，陈述句中应使用 'important things'。

× they should remember their phone number, their password code and their friend's birthday

✓ they should remember their phone numbers, their password codes and their friends' birthdays

复数形式应与复数主语一致，'phone number'、'password code' 和 'friend's birthday' 应改为复数形式。

× And it is really important because umm, it is is necessary for people to

✓ And it is really important because, umm, it is necessary for people to remember these things

句子不完整，缺少谓语部分，需补充完整表达。

× I usually just write down on my notebook

✓ I usually just write it down in my notebook

'write down' 后应接宾语，且 'write down on' 不正确，正确用法是 'write it down in'。

× sometimes I will keep it in my phone and I will check it every day to make sure I remember everything

✓ sometimes I keep it on my phone and check it every day to make sure I remember everything

'keep it in my phone' 应改为 'keep it on my phone'，且时态保持一致，去掉多余的 'will'。

× Like, uh, where, where I put my kids in or where I parked

✓ Like, uh, where I put my keys or where I parked

'kids' 应为 'keys'，且 'put my keys in' 结构不完整，应去掉 'in'。