记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且有重复和冗余。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并注意语法正确。

範例: No, I'm not good at memorising things because I often forget important daily tasks, like taking my keys when I go out.

建議: 回答缺乏连贯性，语法和表达不准确。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并具体说明忘记的事情。

範例: Yes, definitely. I often forget important tasks, not only in daily life but also in my workshop plans. For example, I sometimes forget to bring the map when I need it.

建議: 回答表达混乱，语法错误多，内容不具体。建议直接回答问题，使用简单清晰的句子，并具体说明需要记住的事项。

範例: In my daily life, I need to remember small things like taking my keys before going out, as well as important things like work tests and plans.

建議: 回答较为自然，但有语法错误和表达不清。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式，使内容更连贯。

範例: Nowadays, I remember important things by recording my tasks and plans on my mobile phone, so I can easily check them anywhere, like on the subway or in the car.

× No, I'm not good memories since actually I'm forgettable peoples.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorising things since actually I'm forgetful.

这里'memories'和'peoples'使用错误，'memories'是名词复数，应该用形容词'good at memorising things'来表达擅长记忆，'peoples'是复数形式，指不同民族，应该用形容词'forgetful'表示健忘。

× No, I'm not good memories since actually I'm forgettable peoples.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorising things since actually I'm forgetful.

'forgettable peoples'用法错误，'forgettable'是形容词，'peoples'是名词复数，且语境不合，应改为形容词'forgetful'来形容自己健忘。

× I always forget some important things in daily life such as I need to go out, take the keys, but I I always forget that.

✓ I always forget some important things in daily life, such as needing to go out and take the keys, but I always forget them.

句子结构混乱，'such as I need to go out, take the keys'不符合表达习惯，应改为动名词短语'needing to go out and take the keys'，并且'forget that'应改为'forget them'指代前面的事情。

× That's not only represent my daily life, it also shows in my workshop plans.

✓ That not only represents my daily life, it also shows in my workshop plans.

'represent'动词与主语'That'不一致，应使用第三人称单数形式'represents'。

× That's not only represent my daily life, it also shows in my workshop plans.

✓ That not only represents my daily life, it also shows in my workshop plans.

主语'That'为第三人称单数，动词应使用第三人称单数形式'represents'。

× I always forget some important tasks such as need to accompany the the map in these days, but I always forget that.

✓ I always forget some important tasks, such as needing to bring the map these days, but I always forget them.

'need to accompany the the map'表达不清且重复，'accompany'用法不当，应改为'needing to bring the map'，并且'forget that'应改为'forget them'。

× Oh, that's evolved to mechanism not only in some detail such as need to take a keys before they go out and also in some importance things such as in the workable test and do some plans.

✓ Oh, that's evolved into a mechanism not only for some details such as needing to take keys before going out, but also for important things such as work tests and making plans.

'evolved to mechanism'应为'evolved into a mechanism'，'a keys'中'keys'为复数，不应加冠词'a'，'some importance things'应为'important things'，句子结构混乱需调整。

× Oh, that's evolved to mechanism not only in some detail such as need to take a keys before they go out and also in some importance things such as in the workable test and do some plans.

✓ Oh, that's evolved into a mechanism not only for some details such as needing to take keys before going out, but also for important things such as work tests and making plans.

'evolved to'应为'evolved into'，'in some detail'应为'for some details'，'in the workable test'应为'work tests'，介词使用错误。

× Oh, that's evolved to mechanism not only in some detail such as need to take a keys before they go out and also in some importance things such as in the workable test and do some plans.

✓ Oh, that's evolved into a mechanism not only for some details such as needing to take keys before going out, but also for important things such as work tests and making plans.

'need to take'应改为动名词形式'needing to take'，'do some plans'应改为'making plans'，符合动词+ing形式的用法。

× Yeah, in this day I found a way to remember that is I always record my test and my plans in my mobile phones so I can easily can read the bank.

✓ Yeah, nowadays I have found a way to remember things: I always record my tasks and plans on my mobile phone so I can easily check them.

句子结构混乱，'in this day'应为'nowadays'，'found'时态应与上下文一致改为现在完成时，'test'应为'tasks'，'can easily can read the bank'重复且表达不清，应改为'can easily check them'。

× Yeah, in this day I found a way to remember that is I always record my test and my plans in my mobile phones so I can easily can read the bank.

✓ Yeah, nowadays I have found a way to remember things: I always record my tasks and plans on my mobile phone so I can easily check them.

'my mobile phones'应为单数'my mobile phone'，因为通常指一个手机。

× Yeah, in this day I found a way to remember that is I always record my test and my plans in my mobile phones so I can easily can read the bank.

✓ Yeah, nowadays I have found a way to remember things: I always record my tasks and plans on my mobile phone so I can easily check them.

'can easily can read'中'adverb placement'错误，重复使用'can'，应删除一个，且'read the bank'表达不当，应改为'check them'。

× This list in everywhere, maybe in subways or maybe in the cars.

✓ This list is everywhere, maybe in subways or in cars.

缺少动词'is'，'in the cars'中'the'不必要，应为'in cars'。