记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and gives solutions, but some language is awkward and there are small grammar mistakes. Make your response more concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verbs (e.g., “writing down”), and avoid redundancy. Limit to 3–4 sentences and add a linking word when giving supporting detail.

範例: I’m not very good at memorising things quickly these days. However, I use simple strategies to help me remember, such as writing down notes or recording voice reminders on my phone. These methods usually work well when I need to recall facts later.

建議: Good personal example, but the answer is slightly long and has grammar and cohesion issues (capitalisation, run-on sentence). Start with a direct statement, use commas and linking words correctly, and give a brief consequence or improvement. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I have — I often forget my keys and sometimes get locked out. To solve this, I keep a spare key with my landlady, although it can be inconvenient. I’m also trying to check my bag before leaving to avoid this problem.

建議: The idea is thoughtful, but the connection to “remembering” is indirect and some words are incorrect (e.g., “distress” should be “de-stress” or “relax”). Begin with a clear topic sentence stating what you need to remember, then give specific examples with linking words. Fix subject-verb agreement and word choice.

範例: I need to remember to stay positive and look after my mood every day. For example, when I feel stressed I listen to music or practise deep breathing to calm down, and this helps me keep a balanced mindset.

建議: This is a clear and effective answer with a useful specific method. Improve naturalness by removing redundancy ("just to make sure") and by using a linking phrase to explain benefit. Try to limit to two sentences and use correct tense/wording.

範例: I set reminders on my phone for important dates like birthdays and anniversaries, so I get alerted in advance. This helps me prepare and avoid forgetting special occasions.

× At my age, I think it's difficult for me to memorize things right away.

✓ At my age, I think it's difficult for me to memorize things right away.

No change needed: sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'to memorize' infinitive is correct for expressing ability/difficulty. No verb+-ing error present.

× However, I do some ways to help me remember the facts or information I need by chatting down notes or maybe recording on my phone.

✓ However, I use some ways to help me remember the facts or information I need by jotting down notes or maybe recording on my phone.

Original used 'chatting down notes' which is incorrect verb form and collocation. Use 'jotting down notes' (verb + -ing) to show the action of writing briefly. 'Use some ways' is more natural than 'do some ways.' Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'jot down notes' and use 'use' for employing methods.

× Yes, I usually forget my keys and get locked up whenever I go out or go to work, So what I did is to get a spare key from my landlady, which I think sometimes it's annoying and impractical.

✓ Yes, I usually forget my keys and get locked out whenever I go out or go to work. So what I did was get a spare key from my landlady, which I think is sometimes annoying and impractical.

Problems: mixed tense and wrong phrasal verb. 'Get locked up' means imprisoned; correct is 'get locked out.' For past action describing what was done, use past tense 'did was' or 'did was get' -> 'did was get a spare key' but better 'what I did was get a spare key' or 'I got a spare key'. Ensure verb tense consistency. Also change capital 'So' after comma to new sentence.

× However I'm trying to do my best.

✓ However, I'm trying to do my best.

Missing comma after 'However' and contraction needs apostrophe; grammatically correct otherwise. Present continuous 'I'm trying' fits ongoing effort. Suggest adding comma for clarity.

× There are a lot of things to mention that is essential in my daily life, but I think the most important is being happy.

✓ There are a lot of things to mention that are essential in my daily life, but I think the most important is being happy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'things... that are essential' requires plural verb 'are' not 'is.' 'There are' already correct. Keep plural agreement for relative clause.

× I try to stay relaxed all day and whenever I have bad day I find ways to distress by listening to music or thinking about positive things.

✓ I try to stay relaxed all day, and whenever I have a bad day I find ways to de-stress by listening to music or thinking about positive things.

Errors: missing article 'a bad day.' 'Distress' is a noun meaning suffering; the correct verb is 'de-stress' (verb + -ing as needed: 'by de-stressing' or 'to de-stress'). Better: 'find ways to de-stress.' Add comma before 'and' for readability.

× Whenever I need to remember important things such as birthdays or anniversaries, I make sure I put a note or reminder on my phone just to make sure I won't forget a day before.

✓ Whenever I need to remember important things such as birthdays or anniversaries, I make sure I put a note or reminder on my phone so I won't forget them the day before.

Problems: redundant 'make sure' twice and unclear 'a day before' placement. Use modal 'won't' correctly with plural 'them' to refer to 'birthdays or anniversaries.' Move 'the day before' after 'forget' for clarity. Suggest eliminating redundancy and ensuring pronoun agreement.