记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and organization. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and plural forms, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid redundant phrases.

範例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things because I am a medical student and often need to learn many medical terms. For example, before exams I usually revise topics intensively for a week, using flashcards and short summaries. This method helps me retain information more effectively.

建議: Focus on a concise recount with correct past tense and clear sequence words (first, then, finally). Eliminate repetition and fix articles/plurals. Use one or two specific details and a concluding statement about what you learned.

範例: Yes, once I forgot my identity card before a flight. I packed my bag at the last minute and, a few hours before departure, I realised it was missing. After searching frantically I finally found it in a shirt pocket, which taught me to check important documents earlier.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and two specific examples with linking words. Correct grammar (articles, word order) and reduce filler words. Use concrete details such as times or items to make it more specific.

範例: In daily life I mainly need to remember my class schedule and my shopping list. For example, I note the time of each lecture so I don't oversleep, and I write a short grocery list with items like milk and vegetables before going to the supermarket.

建議: Provide a clear method description with correct verb forms and fewer fillers. Use linking words to explain why the method works and include a specific example of a technique (e.g. flashcards, spaced repetition). Keep it to three sentences.

範例: I use active revision techniques to remember important information. For instance, I read notes while walking in a quiet playground and use flashcards to review key points; the movement helps refresh my mind and improves recall.

× Yes I would say I'm perfect at memorizing thing because I'm a medical student so I often need to memorize a lot of medical term and the knowledge in a few weeks because I also last met person so one week before the exam I always need to memorize a lot of thing.

✓ Yes, I would say I'm good at memorizing things because I'm a medical student, so I often need to memorize a lot of medical terms and knowledge in a few weeks; also, because I last met people, one week before the exam I always need to memorize a lot of things.

This sentence has several article and pluralization issues: 'thing' should be plural 'things' when speaking generally, and 'medical term' should be 'medical terms'. Use 'a lot of' with plural nouns. Also use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple items and add articles where needed. Note: Other problems in this sentence also involve word choice and sentence structure, but per instructions only article/plural issues are corrected here.

× So it was because I like to pack the luggage last minute.

✓ So it was because I like to pack my luggage at the last minute.

Subject-verb agreement and noun use: 'the luggage' is unnatural when referring to one's own bags; use 'my luggage'. Also include the article 'the' in the phrase 'at the last minute'. Suggestion: use possessive pronouns for personal items and standard time expressions 'at the last minute'.

× So a few hour before my flight I just realised I don't know where I put my identity card.

✓ A few hours before my flight I realized I didn't know where I had put my identity card.

Tense sequence is incorrect: an action that happened earlier (putting the ID) should be in the past perfect 'had put'. Also 'a few hour' should be plural 'a few hours', and 'don't know' should be past 'didn't know'. Suggestion: use past perfect for the earlier past action and match plural forms.

× So it took me a few hour and it was really stressful and eventually I've I realised that I put it inside a shirt pocket, so it was.

✓ It took me a few hours and it was really stressful, and eventually I realized that I had put it inside a shirt pocket.

'A few hour' should be 'a few hours' (quantifier + plural). 'I've I realised' is garbled; use simple past 'I realized'. Also the earlier action needs past perfect 'had put'. Suggestion: match quantifiers with plural nouns and use correct past tenses.

× So As for my daily life, I often need to remember about the class schedules of today so that I won't sleep late.

✓ As for my daily life, I often need to remember today's class schedule so that I don't sleep late.

Use present simple 'don't' instead of future 'won't' when stating habitual actions. 'Class schedules of today' is awkward; use 'today's class schedule' (singular if referring to the day's schedule). Suggestion: use present simple for routines and use natural noun phrases.

× And then beside this, I also remember I what I need to my grocery list so that when I go out from my house I can go through the supermarket to buy the thing I need.

✓ Also, I keep my grocery list of what I need so that when I leave my house I can go to the supermarket to buy the things I need.

Incorrect verb forms and word order: 'remember I what I need to my grocery list' is ungrammatical. Use verbs like 'keep' or 'write' plus a noun 'grocery list'. 'Go out from my house' should be 'leave my house' and 'go through the supermarket' should be 'go to the supermarket'. Use plural 'things'. Suggestion: use clear verb+noun collocations and correct prepositions.

× Because I'm a medical student, I often need to remember almost everything in my textbook.

✓ Because I'm a medical student, I often need to remember almost everything in my textbooks.

Minor noun number agreement: 'textbook' can be plural if referring to multiple books; use 'textbooks' when generalizing. Present tense 'need' is fine. Suggestion: choose singular or plural to match meaning.

× So one way that I remember the important thing is that I often go to the playground to read and then while standing.

✓ One way I remember important things is that I often go to the playground to read while standing.

Word order and redundancy errors: 'and then while standing' is awkward and creates a fragment. Combine actions: 'to read while standing'. Also pluralize 'important things'. Suggestion: simplify structure and place modifiers next to the verb they modify.

× This is because through walking through the playground I can have my mind refreshed and I can like force myself to remember it to.

✓ This is because walking through the playground refreshes my mind and helps me force myself to remember it.

Awkward adverbial phrase 'through walking through the playground' and incorrect adverb placement 'have my mind refreshed' is passive-like but awkward. 'I can like force myself to remember it to' contains filler 'like' and stray 'to'. Suggestion: use active verbs, remove fillers, and place adverbs and objects correctly.