记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and correct tenses and word forms (e.g., “memorizing” not “memorising” depending on variety, and use ‘I learned’ or ‘I memorized 400–440 English words last year’).

範例: Yes, I’m quite good at memorizing. For example, last year I memorized about 400–440 English words in three months, which helped improve my vocabulary quickly.

建議: Avoid absolute statements like “never”; they sound unrealistic. Use correct grammar (e.g., “I’ve never written things down” → “I rarely write things down”) and one clear reason with a linking word (because/so). Reduce repetition and use collocations like “focus” and “concentrate on details.”

範例: I rarely forget important things because I keep them in my head rather than writing them down, so I find I can stay more focused and concentrate on details.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific examples. Fix grammar and word order (e.g., “meetings” and “exact time and day”); use linking words like “for example” or “such as.” Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: I need to remember my meetings every day. For example, I have online meetings on some days and face-to-face meetings on others, so I always note the exact day and time in my calendar.

建議: Be specific about the method and use correct nouns and articles (e.g., “an app” or “a calendar app”). Use linking words like “for example” and avoid repetition. Provide one clear result of using the tool (e.g., “so I never miss events”).

範例: I use a calendar app on my phone to record important events, such as birthdays and parties, so it reminds me of my schedule and prevents me from missing appointments.

× I think overall I am good at memorizing things, so I say this because last year I took 400 and 440 English words and I memorized every word.

✓ I think overall I am good at memorizing things; I say this because last year I learned 400 and 440 English words and memorized every word.

Use of 'took' is incorrect when referring to learning words; choose a verb that fits the action (learned, studied, memorized). Also remove redundant 'I' before 'memorized' and use punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: use 'learned' or 'studied' for past action of acquiring vocabulary.

× I've never forgotten something important.

✓ I have never forgotten anything important.

Use 'anything' rather than 'something' in negative sentences with 'never'. Also expand contraction for clarity if needed. Suggestion: use 'anything' after negative expressions (never, no, none).

× I always try to memorize only in my brain.

✓ I always try to memorize things only in my head.

Phrase 'in my brain' is unnatural in English; 'in my head' is idiomatic. Also 'memorize things only in my head' places 'only' for correct emphasis. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions and place adverbs to show intended meaning.

× I've never write write down and I think it helps me to be more focused and concentrates details.

✓ I've never written things down, and I think it helps me to be more focused and to concentrate on details.

After 'have' in present perfect, use past participle 'written', not 'write'. Remove the duplicated 'write'. Also parallel structure: 'to be more focused and to concentrate on details' or 'more focused and concentrate on details'. Use 'concentrate on' with 'details'. Suggestion: use correct past participle after perfect auxiliaries and maintain parallel verb forms.

× In my daily life I need to remember my meetings so I sometimes some online meetings, sometimes face to face meetings and I need to remember the exact week time we are here this meetings.

✓ In my daily life I need to remember my meetings; sometimes they are online and sometimes face-to-face, and I need to remember the exact time and day of these meetings.

Original has redundant 'some' and incorrect noun forms ('this meetings'). Use 'they' to refer to meetings, hyphenate 'face-to-face', and use 'these meetings' for plural. 'Exact week time we are here' is unclear; 'exact time and day' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: avoid redundant words, ensure pronoun agreement, and use clear time expressions.

× I have a application in my home and I always have the important thing in this calendar such as birthdays and also some about some parties and it helps me to remind my schedule schedule.

✓ I have an application on my phone at home, and I always put important things in its calendar, such as birthdays and parties; it helps me remember my schedule.

Use 'an' before vowel sound 'application'. 'On my phone' is more natural than 'in my home'. Use 'put' or 'enter' important things 'in its calendar'. Remove duplicated 'schedule'. 'Remind my schedule' is incorrect; use 'helps me remember my schedule'. Suggestion: choose correct articles, prepositions, and verbs for common collocations, and avoid repetition.