记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct basic grammar and word forms. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct plural/singular errors (e.g., "other people's faces and names"). Use linking words like "however" for contrast.

範例: I'm reasonably good at remembering facts, but I wouldn't say I have a sharp memory. For example, I often forget other people's faces and names when I first meet them, which makes introductions awkward. However, I can usually remember details related to my studies or work.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and tense, and be specific about consequences and actions taken. Fix repetitions and wrong word choices ("I forgot my mom's birthday"; "she was very upset with me"; "I had to apologize"; "make a birthday card to show I felt guilty" or "to make it up to her"). Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to show result.

範例: Yes. Last month I forgot my mother's birthday, so she was very upset with me. I apologized and made a homemade birthday card to make it up to her, and I also promised to remember it next year.

建議: Be specific and use correct vocabulary and plural forms (e.g., "class schedules" or "class times", "exam dates", "assignment deadlines"). Organize answer: topic sentence then listing with linking words like "for example" or "such as". Mention one method you use and explain briefly.

範例: I need to remember many practical things every day. For example, I keep track of class schedules, exam dates and assignment deadlines. To manage these, I record them on my phone calendar and set reminders so I don't miss anything.

建議: Provide a clear method description with correct phrasing and coherent sentences. Avoid unclear phrases like "recite as a lure students" and "lower conceptions." Explain the technique and why it helps, using linking words such as "for example" or "because."

範例: The most effective method for me is active recall. For example, before final exams I write key points on paper and repeatedly recite them aloud because this helps reinforce the concepts and shows me which areas I still need to review.

× I'm OK at memorizing things but I wouldn't say I have a sharp memory.

✓ I'm OK at memorizing things, but I wouldn't say I have a sharp memory.

Comma needed before coordinating conjunction 'but' joining two independent clauses. This is punctuation rather than grammar category, but it affects sentence clarity. Suggestion: place a comma before 'but' when connecting two complete clauses.

× I'm terrible at memorizing others faces and name, especially when I just get to know them.

✓ I'm terrible at memorizing other people's faces and names, especially when I have just met them.

Use 'other people's' to show possession and pluralize both 'faces' and 'names'. 'When I just get to know them' is awkward and tense-inappropriate; use present perfect 'have just met' to indicate recently meeting someone. Suggestion: use possessive form and match plural forms and appropriate tense.

× Yes last month I I forgot my mom's birthday.

✓ Yes, last month I forgot my mom's birthday.

Remove duplicated 'I' and add comma after introductory phrase 'Yes'. Keep past tense 'forgot' to match time reference. Suggestion: avoid repeated words and punctuate introductory elements.

× She said she was very upset be with me and I have to apologize to her and make a made a birthday card to her to show my guilty.

✓ She said she was very upset with me, and I had to apologize to her and make a birthday card to show my guilt.

Replace 'upset be with me' with 'upset with me'. Use past tense 'had to' to match 'last month'. Remove duplicate 'made a' and use 'make a birthday card' or 'made a birthday card' consistently; here past 'had to... make' is appropriate. Use 'guilt' (noun) not 'guilty' (adjective). Suggestion: correct verb order, remove duplication, and use correct noun form.

× There are lots of things I need to remember in my daily life.

✓ There are lots of things I need to remember in my daily life.

Sentence is correct; 'lots of things' matches plural. No change needed.

× Something like my class jewels, my examination datas, and all the assignments deadlines I need to remember then, and sometimes I record them on the phone in order to help me.

✓ Things like my class schedule, my exam dates, and all the assignment deadlines I need to remember, and sometimes I record them on my phone to help me.

Replace incorrect words: 'class jewels' -> 'class schedule' or appropriate phrase; 'examination datas' -> 'exam dates' (data is uncountable and 'dates' is correct); 'assignments deadlines' -> 'assignment deadlines' (noun order). 'record them on the phone' -> 'record them on my phone'. 'in order to help me' -> 'to help me'. Suggestion: use correct collocations and noun order and use 'my phone' for possession.

× For me the most effective way is recite as a lure students.

✓ For me, the most effective way is to recite as a way to learn and remember things.

Original is ungrammatical: missing infinitive 'to recite' and 'as a lure students' is incorrect phrase. 'Lure' is wrong word; likely intended 'help students' or 'learn'. Also need comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'is' and choose correct nouns/phrases.

× Every time before final exam.

✓ Every time before a final exam,

This fragment lacks a main clause (sentence without a verb). It should attach to the next sentence or be completed: 'Every time before a final exam, I...'. Also include article 'a' before 'final exam'. Suggestion: combine with following clause and add article.

× I need to remember tons of lower conceptions and I find I force myself to recite on the paper in order.

✓ I need to remember tons of basic concepts, and I find that I force myself to write them on paper in order.

Replace 'lower conceptions' with 'basic concepts' (word choice) and 'recite on the paper' with 'write them on paper' for clarity. Add 'that' after 'find' for fluency. Use present tense 'need' and 'find' consistently. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and appropriate verb phrase 'write on paper' or 'recite aloud' depending on intended meaning.