记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法ミスと冗長表現が目立ちます。主語と動詞の一致（"it stimulates"）、不必要な語の重複（"to to" や "remember memories"）を直すこと、そして一文で完結するトピックセンテンス＋補足の構成に整えることを意識してください。具体的には簡潔な主張（Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things.）→理由（I often review photos on my phone.）→効果（which helps me recall events and details.）の順で2〜3文にまとめる練習をしてください。

範例: Yes, I'm fairly good at remembering things. I often review photos on my phone, which helps me recall events and details more easily.

建議: 内容は"忘れた"という経験を伝えようとしていますが、文が崩れて意味が不明瞭です。まずは簡潔なトピックセンテンスで経験を述べ、その後で具体的な状況と理由を加えるとよいです（例："Yes, once I forgot to submit an important drawing in junior high school because I misunderstood the deadline."). 文法（過去形の一貫性）と語順に注意し、不要な単語や繰り返しを避けてください。

範例: Yes. When I was in junior high, I forgot to submit an important drawing because I misunderstood the deadline, and as a result my teacher reminded me and I received a low mark.

建議: 考えは良いですが、表現が不自然で語彙の間違い（"families"→"family's"または"family members'"、"improve improve"の重複、"communicate with present"は不明確）があります。まず主張（I need to remember birthdays.）→理由（it helps maintain relationships）→具体例（sending messages or giving presents）という流れで整理してください。より適切な語彙（celebrate, keep in touch, give presents）を使う練習をしてください。

範例: I try to remember my friends' and family's birthdays because celebrating them helps maintain our relationships. For example, I usually send a message or give a small present.

建議: 主旨は伝わりますが、表現の重複（"I'm a big fan"二回）と文法・語順の乱れ（"calendar on my phone"→"the calendar on my phone"、"I want to I can"の誤り）が目立ちます。明確なトピックセンテンス（I rely on my phone's calendar.）→理由（it's convenient and allows reminders）→具体的な使い方（set alarms, repeat events）という構成で2〜3文にまとめましょう。具体的な機能を挙げると説得力が増します。

範例: I rely on the calendar app on my phone because it's convenient and sends me reminders. I usually set alarms and repeat events for important tasks so I don't forget them.

× Yes, this is because I usually look back my pictures on my phone and it stimulate my brain to to remember memories.

✓ Yes, this is because I usually look back at my pictures on my phone and it stimulates my brain to remember memories.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'look back my pictures' requires preposition 'at' (preposition error, but primary fix uses verb+ing/listing). 'stimulate' must be 'stimulates' to agree with singular subject 'it' (third person singular). Remove the duplicated 'to' and using 'to remember memories' is redundant but acceptable. Suggestion: use 'look back at' and ensure subject-verb agreement by adding -s for third person singular: 'it stimulates'.

× Yes, when I was a junior high school student, I tended to forget submitted that the drawing of submitting therefore teacher made always made me.

✓ Yes, when I was a junior high school student, I tended to forget to submit drawings, so my teacher always reminded me.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing (sentence structure error). 'forget submitted that the drawing of submitting' mixes forms. Use 'forget to submit drawings' (correct verb pattern: forget to + verb). 'therefore teacher made always made me' is incorrect word order and verb choice; use 'so my teacher always reminded me.' Suggestion: simplify idea: 'forget to submit drawings' and use proper conjunction 'so' and verb 'reminded'.

× I think it is significant to remember my friends or families birthday since it can improve improve our relationship to communicate with present.

✓ I think it is important to remember my friends' or family's birthdays because it can improve our relationships and communication.

Problems: 'friends or families birthday' needs possessive and plural: 'friends' or 'family's' and 'birthdays' (plural). 'significant' is awkward; 'important' is more natural. 'since it can improve improve our relationship to communicate with present' is awkward and repetitive. Use 'because it can improve our relationships and communication.' Also fix possessive with apostrophe and plural forms. Suggestion: use possessive nouns and parallel nouns: 'friends' or 'family's birthdays' and concise phrasing.

× I'm a big fan. Actually, I'm a big fan of calendar on my phone. This is because it is so convenient that I want to I can manage my schedule all the time.

✓ I'm a big fan of the calendar on my phone because it is so convenient that I can manage my schedule all the time.

The original repeats 'I'm a big fan' and has awkward phrasing 'fan of calendar on my phone' (needs article 'the') and 'I want to I can' is a garbled clause. Combine sentences for clarity and correct article usage: 'the calendar on my phone'. Use 'I can manage' rather than 'I want to I can'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure a single clear clause explaining the reason.