巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: I don't like eating chocolate because it's too rich and makes me thirsty. Also, chocolate contains a lot of sugar, which I think is bad for our health.

建議: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer. Avoid repeating previous points unnecessarily and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically.

範例: I almost never eat chocolate because it's unhealthy and makes me thirsty. Besides, chocolate is quite expensive, so I prefer to avoid it.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct tenses and clearer sentence structures. Use linking words to contrast past and present habits effectively.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid, especially during celebrations like New Year's. However, now that I'm older, I rarely eat it because I am more health-conscious.

建議: Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is sweet and affordable for many people. Moreover, it can be added to desserts and beverages, which makes it very versatile.

建議: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to explain your preferences clearly and keep your answer concise.

範例: I don't really like chocolate, but I sometimes eat mint-flavoured chocolate ice cream because it's not too sweet.

建議: Try to give a clear and complete answer. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically and provide specific examples.

範例: Yes, chocolate is a popular gift, especially on Valentine's Day. Many people give chocolate to their partners as a symbol of love and affection.

× Actually I don't like chocolate since it's too rich and when I eat too rich it will makes me thirsty.

✓ Actually I don't like chocolate since it's too rich and when I eat too much it makes me thirsty.

The phrase 'eat too rich' is incorrect because 'rich' is an adjective and cannot be used directly after 'eat'. The correct form is 'eat too much' to indicate quantity. Also, 'will makes' is incorrect; 'makes' is the correct present tense form here because the condition is general.

× In other hands calculate has more has high sugar so it's it has it is detrimental to our health.

✓ On the other hand, chocolate has a high sugar content, so it is detrimental to our health.

The phrase 'In other hands calculate' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'On the other hand'. Also, 'has more has high sugar' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'has a high sugar content'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I almost never eat chocolate. As I mentioned above, chocolate has it's unhealthy and makes me thirsty as well.

✓ I almost never eat chocolate. As I mentioned above, chocolate is unhealthy and makes me thirsty as well.

'Chocolate has it's unhealthy' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' and 'unhealthy' is an adjective, so 'chocolate is unhealthy' is correct. Also, 'has' is unnecessary here.

× On the other hand, chocolate will Chocolate is expensive and not it's not food.

✓ On the other hand, chocolate is expensive and not really food.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('chocolate will Chocolate'). It should be a clear statement: 'chocolate is expensive and not really food' to convey the intended meaning.

× Sure, when I was a kid there is no concern about my health, so I ate chocolate for every every year, every happy New Year's.

✓ Sure, when I was a kid there was no concern about my health, so I ate chocolate every year, every Happy New Year.

'There is' is present tense but the context is past, so 'there was' is correct. Also, 'for every every year' is redundant; 'every year' suffices. 'Happy New Year's' should be 'Happy New Year'.

× However, when I grow up, I seldom or even never to aid them again.

✓ However, when I grew up, I seldom or even never ate them again.

'When I grow up' should be past tense 'when I grew up' to match the past context. 'To aid them' is incorrect; likely intended 'ate them'. The verb 'ate' is past tense to match the time frame.

× Because chocolate is inexpensive and it's sweet for most of the people and it also can to be added to some desert or or beverage so it is really popular around the world.

✓ Because chocolate is inexpensive and sweet to most people, and it can also be added to some desserts or beverages, it is really popular around the world.

'Sweet for most of the people' should be 'sweet to most people'. 'Can to be added' is incorrect; it should be 'can also be added'. 'Desert' is a misspelling of 'dessert'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I'm not I'm not really like chocolate, however some of the chocolate I will eat seldomly.

✓ I don't really like chocolate; however, I will eat some chocolate seldomly.

'I'm not really like chocolate' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't really like chocolate'. 'Seldomly' is less common but acceptable; placement is adjusted for clarity.

× For example the the mint flavor I will eat the ice cream since it's not really not really sweet so I will eat it sometimes.

✓ For example, the mint flavor ice cream I will eat since it's not really sweet, so I will eat it sometimes.

The phrase 'the the mint flavor I will eat the ice cream' is awkward. It should be 'the mint flavor ice cream I will eat'. Also, 'not really not really sweet' is redundant; one 'not really' suffices.

× Sure, especially in the Valentine's Day. Every people with boyfriend or girlfriend will send him or her the chocolate as a gift on Valentine's Day actually.

✓ Sure, especially on Valentine's Day. Everyone with a boyfriend or girlfriend will send their partner chocolate as a gift on Valentine's Day.

'In the Valentine's Day' should be 'on Valentine's Day'. 'Every people' is incorrect; 'everyone' is correct. 'Send him or her the chocolate' is awkward; 'send their partner chocolate' is more natural.