巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words like 'uh'. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, ensure subject-verb agreement, for example, 'chocolate is' instead of 'chocolate are'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I love eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and delicious. When I was younger, my parents often brought chocolates home, so I used to eat a lot. However, now I try to limit my consumption.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases like 'someone comes from everyone' and 'bought software'. Try to give a clear, direct answer with relevant details. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

範例: I don't eat chocolate often nowadays. However, when I meet my friends or someone visits from abroad, they usually bring me some international chocolates, which I really enjoy.

建議: Your answer is generally clear but has some redundancy and informal phrases like 'what happened was like'. Try to use more formal and concise language, and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate as a child because I loved it. Even after developing cavities, I continued eating it daily. Eventually, my parents took me to the dentist, who advised me to reduce my chocolate intake.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but is somewhat unclear and contains awkward phrases like 'get break from this dress'. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delightful taste and aroma. Many people enjoy it as a treat to relax and feel happy, almost like a small comfort during stressful times.

建議: Your answer provides good reasons but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing like 'taste is quite seductive' and 'there is not additive'. Try to use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar.

範例: If I had to choose, I would pick dark chocolate because it tastes rich and is healthier than other types. It contains natural caffeine, which can be beneficial, and usually has no additives.

建議: Your answer repeats ideas and has unclear phrases like 'an A kind of thing'. Try to be more concise and use clearer expressions. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

範例: I believe chocolate is a great gift because many people admire and enjoy it. Giving chocolate usually makes the recipient happy, so it is a thoughtful and popular present.

× I love eating chocolate because, uh, chocolate are very delicious.

✓ I love eating chocolate because, uh, chocolate is very delicious.

The word 'chocolate' is uncountable or singular here, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× I love their taste.

✓ I love its taste.

Since 'chocolate' is singular or uncountable, the possessive pronoun should be 'its' instead of 'their'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns related to singular and plural.

× my parents used to bring, uh, a lot of chocolates back in the days

✓ my parents used to bring, uh, a lot of chocolate back in the days

When referring to chocolate in general, it is uncountable, so 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I have not been so addicted eating chocolates

✓ I have not been so addicted to eating chocolate

'Addicted' is followed by 'to' plus a noun or gerund. Also, 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. This is a singular and plural issue and verb + -ing form issue.

× I used to eat a lot of chocolate.

✓ I used to eat a lot of chocolate.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I used to eat a lot of chocolates because I used to love a lot of chocolate.

✓ I used to eat a lot of chocolate because I used to love a lot of chocolate.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Even when I had cavities in my tooth, I used to just eat them on a daily basis.

✓ Even when I had cavities in my teeth, I used to just eat it on a daily basis.

'Tooth' should be plural 'teeth' because cavities usually affect multiple teeth. Also, 'them' should be 'it' referring to chocolate (uncountable). This is a singular and plural issue and incorrect use of pronouns.

× I need to just limit my absorption of the chocolate.

✓ I need to just limit my consumption of chocolate.

'Absorption' is incorrect here; 'consumption' is the correct noun for eating or drinking. Also, 'the chocolate' can be just 'chocolate' as general. This is incorrect use of prepositions and word choice.

× Particularly the taste as well as the aroma of the chocolate is very much delightful.

✓ Particularly the taste as well as the aroma of chocolate is very delightful.

'The chocolate' can be just 'chocolate' when speaking generally. Also, 'very much delightful' is awkward; 'very delightful' is better. This is an article error and incorrect use of adjectives.

× People tend to enjoy it because maybe sometime people tend to like get break from this dress and the chocolate is kind of a medicine to it.

✓ People tend to enjoy it because sometimes people tend to like to get a break from stress and chocolate is kind of a medicine for it.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'get break' should be 'get a break'; 'this dress' should be 'stress'; 'medicine to it' should be 'medicine for it'. These are incorrect prepositions and word choice errors.

× If I have to choose then I would obviously go for dark chocolate because the taste is quite seductive and it is less unhealthy than other and like it has some caffeine into it which is quite beneficial for the body.

✓ If I have to choose, then I would obviously go for dark chocolate because the taste is quite seductive and it is less unhealthy than others and it has some caffeine in it which is quite beneficial for the body.

'Other' should be 'others' to compare with plural items; 'into it' should be 'in it'. This is singular and plural issue and incorrect preposition use.

× The amount of the caffeine that they use was quite natural as well as there is not additive in the form of dark chocolate so I think I love it.

✓ The amount of caffeine that they use is quite natural as well as there is no additive in dark chocolate, so I think I love it.

'Was' should be 'is' for present tense; 'not additive' should be 'no additive'; 'in the form of dark chocolate' should be 'in dark chocolate'. These are tense and preposition errors.

× I think chocolate can be one of the good example of sharing the gift to others because it is basically an A kind of thing that people admire and people adore.

✓ I think chocolate can be one of the good examples of sharing gifts with others because it is basically a kind of thing that people admire and adore.

'One of the good example' should be 'one of the good examples'; 'sharing the gift to others' should be 'sharing gifts with others'; 'an A kind of thing' should be 'a kind of thing'. These are article and preposition errors.

× And whenever you give any chocolate to other than they would basically tend to love it whether it is any form of a gift.

✓ And whenever you give any chocolate to others, they would basically tend to love it whether it is any form of a gift.

'Other' should be 'others' as plural pronoun. This is incorrect use of pronouns and prepositions.