巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınız doğal ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. "tasted more soft" ifadesi yerine "tastes softer" kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, "I want to eating something a" ifadesi tamamlanmamış ve anlamı net değil. Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğru yapmak için bu tür hatalardan kaçının.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it makes me feel happier. I especially like milk chocolate because I think it tastes softer. Moreover, chocolate desserts are my favorite treats whenever I want to relax or have a snack.

建議: Cevabınız doğrudan ve anlaşılır ancak "I'm eating chocolate every day" ifadesi yerine "I eat chocolate every day" daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, "dessert addiction" ifadesi biraz abartılı olabilir, daha doğal ifadeler kullanabilirsiniz.

範例: I eat chocolate every day because I really like it. It's my favorite dessert, and I enjoy having it as a treat.

建議: Cümlenizde anlam karışıklığı var. "I used to eat less more than I do now" ifadesi doğru değil. Ayrıca "salsa things" ifadesi ne anlama geldiği belirsiz. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

範例: When I was a child, I used to eat less chocolate than I do now because I preferred spicy snacks.

建議: Cümleniz anlam açısından karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. "Chocolate realizes happiness hormones" ifadesi yerine "Chocolate releases happiness hormones" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha net ve akıcı hale getirmek için gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız.

範例: Chocolate releases hormones that make people feel happy, which is why it is loved all over the world. Also, many people enjoy its delicious taste.

建議: Cümleniz tamamlanmamış ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "the Milky one the way it is eating is" ifadesi anlamlı değil. Daha açık ve doğru cümleler kurmalısınız.

範例: Definitely milk chocolate is my favorite because it tastes softer and more delicious than other types.

建議: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. "gifters" yerine "someone" veya "a person" kullanabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha akıcı ve net yapmak için tekrarları ve yanlış yapıları düzeltmelisiniz.

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift. For example, someone can buy chocolate for their girlfriend or for a friend who is sick to cheer them up.

× Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it makes me feel more happy.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it makes me feel happier.

The comparative form of the adjective 'happy' is 'happier', not 'more happy'. Use 'happier' to correctly express the comparative degree.

× I especially like milk chocolate because I think it's tasted more soft.

✓ I especially like milk chocolate because I think it tastes softer.

The verb 'taste' should be in the simple present tense 'tastes' to describe a general truth. Also, the comparative form of the adjective 'soft' is 'softer', not 'more soft'.

× Moreover, chocolate desserts are my favorite treats whenever I want to relax or I want to eating something a.

✓ Moreover, chocolate desserts are my favorite treats whenever I want to relax or want to eat something.

The phrase 'want to eating' is incorrect; it should be 'want to eat' because 'to' is followed by the base form of the verb. Also, the indefinite article 'a' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× I'm eating chocolate every day because I'm keen on chocolate and that's really important for me.

✓ I eat chocolate every day because I'm keen on chocolate and that's really important for me.

The present continuous tense 'I'm eating' is not appropriate for habitual actions. Use the simple present tense 'I eat' to express habits or routines.

× I have a dessert addiction and chocolate is top one on my list.

✓ I have a dessert addiction and chocolate is the top one on my list.

The phrase 'top one' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the highest rank in a list.

× I used to eat less more than I do now as a child.

✓ I used to eat less than I do now as a child.

The phrase 'less more' is contradictory. Use 'less than' to correctly compare quantities.

× I like salsa things more than chocolate.

✓ I liked salsa things more than chocolate.

Since the sentence refers to a past habit ('as a child'), the verb should be in the past tense 'liked'.

× Because chocolate realizes happiness hormones and I think that's the, that's why, why everybody loves chocolate.

✓ Because chocolate releases happiness hormones and I think that's why everybody loves chocolate.

The phrase 'realizes happiness hormones' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'releases'. Also, the repeated 'that's the, that's why, why' is redundant and should be simplified.

× And I think that's the best thing in the world because, uh, there is a too much chocolate opinion tastes good.

✓ And I think that's the best thing in the world because, uh, there is too much chocolate that tastes good.

The phrase 'a too much' is incorrect; 'too much' does not require an article. Also, 'chocolate opinion' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate that tastes good' or 'chocolates that taste good'.

× Definitely the Milky one the way it is eating is. Much softer and more delicious.

✓ Definitely the milky one; the way it tastes is much softer and more delicious.

The phrase 'the way it is eating is' is incorrect; it should be 'the way it tastes is'. Also, 'Milky' should be lowercase unless it is a brand name.

× Yes, sometimes maybe the gifters have a girlfriend. He can buy a chocolate for his girlfriend or if our friends getting sick we can buy for we can buy chocolate for her or him.

✓ Yes, sometimes maybe the gifters have a girlfriend. He can buy chocolate for his girlfriend, or if our friends are getting sick, we can buy chocolate for her or him.

The phrase 'buy a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here and does not need an article. Also, 'if our friends getting sick' should be 'if our friends are getting sick' to include the auxiliary verb 'are' for present continuous tense.