巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your allergy and how it affects your chocolate consumption. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "Just eat just."

範例: I don't like eating chocolate because I'm allergic to it. However, occasionally I eat a small amount when I feel unwell, but I usually avoid it to maintain my health.

建議: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is a bit confusing. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

範例: I don't buy chocolate every day, but when I really crave it, I buy a small amount and enjoy it.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your thoughts clearly, use correct tenses, and avoid redundancy. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

範例: When I was a kid, I ate a lot of chocolate because I loved it and had no health problems. However, as I grew older, I developed an allergy and started feeling sick after eating chocolate.

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to make it more coherent. Avoid informal phrases like "alright."

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and comes in many varieties, such as dark chocolate, milk chocolate, and mixed flavors. These options appeal to many people.

建議: Your answer has grammatical errors and could be more concise. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve clarity and flow.

範例: I don't have a specific favorite flavor because I enjoy all kinds of chocolate. When I was a child, I only liked dark chocolate, but now I like all types.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar.

範例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because many people love it, and nicely decorated chocolates are perfect for giving to others.

× That's why I always try to avoid chocolate for my healthy lifestyle and that time I keep some chocolate at home.

✓ That's why I always try to avoid chocolate for my healthy lifestyle, but at times I keep some chocolate at home.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and' to connect two contrasting ideas. The conjunction 'but' is more appropriate to show contrast between avoiding chocolate and keeping some at home.

× Just eat just.

✓ I just eat a little.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding a subject and verb clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Usually I don't buy chocolate daily but when I am so much crave about it that time I buying a little and enjoy it.

✓ Usually I don't buy chocolate daily, but when I crave it a lot, I buy a little and enjoy it.

The original sentence misuses verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Am so much crave about it' is incorrect; 'crave it a lot' is correct. 'I buying' should be 'I buy' to match present tense.

× This one has a kid, I eat so much chocolate and I always love to buying chocolate that time In this time I have not any problem about my health and others After sometimes when I was young that time I feel sick for eating chocolate for my allergic problem.

✓ When I was a kid, I ate a lot of chocolate and always loved buying it. At that time, I didn't have any health problems. But after some time, when I was young, I started feeling sick from eating chocolate because of my allergy.

The original sentence is confusing and contains multiple errors in tense, word choice, and sentence structure. Breaking it into clear sentences and correcting verb tenses improves clarity and correctness.

× Personally, I think chocolate is so much sweet, that's why it's popular alright.

✓ Personally, I think chocolate is very sweet, that's why it's popular.

'So much sweet' is incorrect; 'very sweet' is the proper quantifier for adjectives.

× Additionally, there are so many varieties of chocolate like dark chocolate, milk chocolate and mix some chocolate.

✓ Additionally, there are many varieties of chocolate, like dark chocolate, milk chocolate, and mixed chocolates.

The phrase 'mix some chocolate' is incorrect. It should be 'mixed chocolates' to correctly describe varieties. Also, commas are needed for proper list punctuation.

× Actually I'm not have any specific favorite part about chocolate because I enjoy all kind of chocolate.

✓ Actually, I don't have any specific favorite type of chocolate because I enjoy all kinds of chocolate.

'I'm not have' is incorrect; 'I don't have' is correct. 'All kind' should be 'all kinds' to agree in number.

× When I was a child I only like the dark chocolate, but after sometimes I enjoy all kind of chocolate.

✓ When I was a child, I only liked dark chocolate, but after some time, I enjoy all kinds of chocolate.

The verb 'like' should be in past tense 'liked' to match 'was'. 'After sometimes' is incorrect; 'after some time' is correct. 'All kind' should be 'all kinds'.

× Yes, I think it is well to use chocolate as gifts to others because most of the people love chocolate and the chocolate decoration is perfect for gift someone.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as gifts for others because most people love chocolate, and chocolate decorations are perfect for gifting someone.

'It is well' is incorrect; 'it is good' is appropriate. 'Gift someone' should be 'gifting someone' to use the gerund form after 'for'.