巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is good but try to avoid repeating words like 'comforting' twice. Also, make your sentences clearer and more concise. For example, instead of saying 'it always hits', you can say 'it always cheers me up'.

範例: I like eating chocolate because it always cheers me up and brightens my day. Its sweet taste helps me focus on enjoying it without distractions.

建議: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Avoid unclear phrases like 'in the gap of two or three days it Gen'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Although I enjoy chocolate, I know it's not very healthy. Therefore, I usually eat it every two or three days, depending on how much chocolate I have at home.

建議: Try to answer directly and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'I don't remember much about my childhood'. Also, use past tense correctly and provide a reason or example to support your answer.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I have always loved sweets and enjoyed their taste.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and explain your reasons clearly.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it satisfies people's sweet taste preferences. Its unique and rich flavor appeals to many, making it a favorite treat globally.

建議: Be careful with word choice; 'seeds' should be 'types' or 'kinds' of chocolate. Also, try to make your sentences clearer and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your preference.

範例: I enjoy all kinds of chocolate, but my favorite is dark chocolate because it has a slightly sour taste and can be sweet if it has a lower cocoa percentage.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding repeated phrases like 'it is a good it is good'. Also, try to use more formal expressions and linking words for coherence.

範例: Absolutely, chocolate makes a great gift because most people enjoy it. Even if someone doesn't like chocolate, they probably know someone who does, so it is a thoughtful and convenient choice.

× Chocolate has always been one of my comforting, comforting food.

✓ Chocolate has always been one of my comforting foods.

The word 'food' should be plural 'foods' because it refers to one item among multiple comforting foods. In English, when referring to one item among a group, the noun should be plural.

× It always hits and it always makes my day much more brighter.

✓ It always hits and it always makes my day much brighter.

The word 'brighter' is already a comparative adjective, so 'more' is unnecessary and incorrect. Using both 'more' and '-er' together is redundant.

× ...it makes me just focus on its taste and not the surrounding it.

✓ ...it makes me just focus on its taste and not the surroundings.

The word 'surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' to refer to the environment around. Also, 'the surrounding it' is incorrect; 'surroundings' is the correct noun here.

× As much as I like chocolate, I have to admit that chocolates are not very good for your health.

✓ As much as I like chocolate, I have to admit that chocolate is not very good for your health.

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general, so it should be singular. Using 'chocolates' implies countable items like chocolate pieces, which is not intended here.

× So I usually eat chocolate in the gap of two or three days it Gen.

✓ So I usually eat chocolate every two or three days in general.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'In the gap of two or three days it Gen' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses a common expression 'every two or three days' and clarifies 'in general'.

× It generally depends the how much chocolate.

✓ It generally depends on how much chocolate.

The verb 'depend' requires the preposition 'on' before the object. Omitting 'on' is a common error.

× I have the stock of chocolate in my house if there is.

✓ I have a stock of chocolate in my house if there is any.

The phrase 'the stock of chocolate' is unnatural; 'a stock of chocolate' is better. Also, 'if there is' is incomplete; 'if there is any' completes the thought.

× Well, I don't remember much about my childhood, but knowing that I'm a huge freak for sweets right now, currently I do think that I often eat chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ Well, I don't remember much about my childhood, but knowing that I'm a huge freak for sweets right now, I do think that I often ate chocolate when I was a kid.

The phrase 'I often eat chocolate when I was a kid' mixes present tense 'eat' with past time 'when I was a kid'. The verb should be in past tense 'ate' to match the time frame.

× Well, each person has their own palette, taste palette, and sweets are one of them.

✓ Well, each person has his or her own palate, and sweets are one of them.

'Palette' is incorrect; the correct word is 'palate' meaning taste. Also, 'their' is acceptable but 'his or her' is more formal for singular 'each person'.

× And the best food that has a compact sweet is chocolate.

✓ And the best food that has a compact sweetness is chocolate.

The adjective 'sweet' should be the noun 'sweetness' to correctly express the quality possessed by the food.

× The re. I think that's one of the reason why chocolate is very popular all over the world.

✓ Therefore, I think that's one of the reasons why chocolate is very popular all over the world.

'The re.' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'Therefore'. Also, 'one of the reason' should be 'one of the reasons' because 'one of' requires plural noun.

× Well to be honest I like all kinds of seeds because each of them I crave each of them at different time of the year.

✓ Well, to be honest, I like all kinds of sweets because I crave each of them at different times of the year.

'Seeds' is incorrect; the intended word is 'sweets'. Also, 'each of them I crave each of them' is redundant; it should be 'I crave each of them'. 'Time' should be plural 'times'.

× I really like how it is sour as well as sometimes sweet if it has if it's a lower percent dark chocolate.

✓ I really like how it is sour as well as sometimes sweet if it's a lower percentage dark chocolate.

'Percent' should be 'percentage' when used as a noun here. Also, the phrase 'if it has if it's' is redundant; 'if it's' suffices.

× Absolutely. I do think it is a good it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others since it's an easy way out of gift giving.

✓ Absolutely. I do think it is good to use chocolate as a gift for others since it's an easy way out of gift giving.

The phrase 'a good it is good' is redundant; one 'good' suffices. Also, 'gift to others' should be 'gift for others' as the correct preposition.

× ...if we are giving chocolate to a person who is not a fan then I bet that those people also have someone who likes chocolate.

✓ ...if we are giving chocolate to a person who is not a fan, then I bet that those people also have someone who likes chocolate.

A comma is needed before 'then' to separate clauses properly. The preposition 'to' is correct here.