巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, 'Adobe' is incorrect here; you should say 'love'. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Make your answer clear and complete within 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I absolutely love chocolate because it has a sweet and satisfying taste that cheers me up when I feel tired or stressed. For example, I often enjoy eating a small piece after work to relax.

建議: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'I often eat a small piece of dark chocolate in the afternoon because it gives me a quick energy boost.'

範例: I often eat a small piece of dark chocolate in the afternoon because it gives me a quick energy boost and helps me concentrate better.

建議: Use past tense correctly and avoid unclear phrases. Make your answer more structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it made me feel relaxed and happy. I especially liked chocolate bars as a treat after school.

建議: Clarify your ideas and use correct vocabulary. For example, 'dolphin' is incorrect; you might mean 'dopamine'. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it releases dopamine in the brain, which makes people feel happy and relaxed. Therefore, many people enjoy eating it to improve their mood.

建議: Use correct verb forms and complete your sentences. Provide reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: Actually, I enjoy trying dark chocolate because it helps me relax and cheers me up. Also, it has a rich and slightly bitter taste that I like.

建議: Use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, 'substituent' and 'dominate' are incorrect; you should say 'substances' and 'dopamine'. Complete your sentences and explain your ideas clearly.

範例: I think chocolate is a great gift because it can make people feel happy and relaxed. It contains substances that help release dopamine, which improves mood.

× Yes, I absolutely Adobe chocolate because it has a sweet and satisfying taste that always cheer up me when I feel tired and stressed.

✓ Yes, I absolutely adore chocolate because it has a sweet and satisfying taste that always cheers me up when I feel tired and stressed.

The pronoun 'me' should be the object of the phrasal verb 'cheer up', so it should be placed after 'cheer up' as 'cheers me up'. Also, 'Adobe' is a typo and should be 'adore'. The verb 'cheer' needs to agree with the singular subject 'taste', so it should be 'cheers'.

× I often enjoy eating a small piece of dark chocolate in afternoon as uh, A quick test to uh, posting me in energy and improve me more, uh.

✓ I often enjoy eating a small piece of dark chocolate in the afternoon as a quick test to boost my energy and improve me more.

The preposition 'in' requires the definite article 'the' before 'afternoon'. 'Posting me in energy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'boost my energy'. Also, 'improve me more' is awkward; it should be 'improve me' or better 'improve my mood' or 'make me feel better'.

× Emphasizing I enjoy to eat chocolate when I was young because it's for me relax and comfortable also or plus we can say chocolate.

✓ I enjoyed eating chocolate when I was young because it helped me relax and feel comfortable. Also, we can say chocolate is comforting.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by the gerund form 'eating', not the infinitive 'to eat'. The past tense 'enjoyed' fits the past time 'when I was young'. 'It's for me relax and comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'it helped me relax and feel comfortable'.

× In fact, chocolate is going to release and dolphin and also we can say the whole body. We love chocolate because it gives him relax and comfortable, uh, after, uh.

✓ In fact, chocolate causes the release of endorphins throughout the whole body. We love chocolate because it makes us feel relaxed and comfortable afterwards.

'Is going to release and dolphin' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'causes the release of endorphins'. 'Gives him relax and comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'makes us feel relaxed and comfortable'.

× Actually I enjoy to trying dark chocolate because it gives me relax and cheer up me. Also, uh, I.

✓ Actually, I enjoy trying dark chocolate because it helps me relax and cheers me up.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund 'trying', not 'to trying'. 'Gives me relax' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me relax'. 'Cheer up me' should be 'cheers me up'.

× Emphasizing I think a chocolate is a great gift because I can make people feel happy and relaxed. Chocolate contains substituent that help release dominate, which improve mood for.

✓ I think chocolate is a great gift because it can make people feel happy and relaxed. Chocolate contains substances that help release dopamine, which improves mood.

The article 'a' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary when speaking generally. 'Substituent' is incorrect; the correct word is 'substances'. 'Dominate' should be 'dopamine'. 'Help release dominate' should be 'help release dopamine'. 'Improve mood for' is incomplete; it should be 'improves mood'.