巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语言不够自然，表达不够清晰，且有语法错误。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连词连接句子，使回答更流畅。

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it comes in different flavors, such as bitter and sweet. I usually prefer bitter chocolate, especially when I study, because it helps me feel more focused.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确时态和连接词，清晰表达频率和原因。

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often because it contains a lot of sugar and is not healthy. However, I prefer to eat some chocolate when I study because it helps me stay awake and relax.

建議: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的过去时态，简洁明了地说明情况，并避免冗余。

範例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because my parents thought it would make children too active, so they avoided giving us chocolate.

建議: 回答内容不够连贯，表达不清晰。建议使用连接词，清楚说明原因，并举例说明巧克力的受欢迎程度。

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many flavors, like bitter and sweet, so everyone can find one they like. Also, people often give chocolate as gifts during festivals.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达问题，建议简洁表达喜好并说明原因，使用连词使句子更流畅。

範例: My favourite flavour is bitter chocolate because I don't like sweets that are too sugary. Eating bitter chocolate helps me feel relaxed, especially when I am stressed.

建議: 回答表达不够自然，有语法错误。建议直接回答问题，并用具体例子支持观点，使用连词使表达更连贯。

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift. For example, my boyfriend always gives me chocolate on Valentine's Day because it symbolizes sweetness and love.

× Chocolate is a kind of candy but you can choose different flavor like more bitter or more sweet.

✓ Chocolate is a kind of candy but you can choose different flavors like more bitter or more sweet.

flavor是可数名词，表示不同的口味时应使用复数形式flavors。

× So in my mind I always prefer bitter 1 and when I will study I think it can make me feel.

✓ So in my mind I always prefer bitter flavor and when I study I think it can make me feel better.

这里bitter后面缺少名词flavor，且will study时态不合适，应使用一般现在时。

× From my perspective, I think I'm not often eat chocolate because chocolate has a lot of sugar and not good for our health.

✓ From my perspective, I think I don't often eat chocolate because chocolate has a lot of sugar and is not good for our health.

主语是第一人称单数，否定句中应使用do not (don't)加动词原形，且后半句缺少is。

× However, when I was study, I will prefer to have a chocolate because it can help me stay awake and relax.

✓ However, when I was studying, I preferred to have chocolate because it helped me stay awake and relax.

过去时态中，was study应改为was studying，will prefer应改为过去时preferred，时态保持一致。

× No, I never eat chocolate when I were a kid before elementary school because every Asha parents think chocolate will make children to activity so they will avoid children to eat some chocolate even when they.

✓ No, I never ate chocolate when I was a kid before elementary school because every Asha parent thinks chocolate will make children active so they avoid children eating chocolate even then.

过去时态中，eat应改为ate，were应改为was，parents为复数，动词应用thinks改为think，make children to activity表达错误，应为make children active，avoid后接动名词形式eating。

× In my opinion, chocolate is very popular around the world from children to adults because it has a lot of flavor like such as bitter or sweet and you can pick from your opinion.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate is very popular around the world from children to adults because it has a lot of flavors such as bitter or sweet and you can pick according to your preference.

flavor应为复数flavors，like和such as不能同时使用，且表达更自然用according to your preference。

× Emphasize every festival can give them as a gift to others.

✓ Moreover, during every festival, people can give chocolate as a gift to others.

原句结构不完整且用词不当，应使用连接词Moreover引出补充说明，句子更完整。

× Absolutely, I would prefer the bitter one, just a little sugar and chocolate because I don't like something too sweet and when I test some chocolate I will feel very relaxed in my mind or even I have a lot of stress.

✓ Absolutely, I would prefer the bitter one, with just a little sugar and chocolate because I don't like something too sweet and when I taste some chocolate I feel very relaxed in my mind even when I have a lot of stress.

a little sugar前应加介词with，test应改为taste，时态应保持一致，feel后不需will。

× I will try one to relax myself from.

✓ I will try one to relax myself.

短语中from多余，应去掉。

× I would say it is good to use chocolate as gift to others for take myself for example when I celebrate Valentine's Day, my boyfriend always like to give me the chocolate because he's saying chocolate is relative to sweet and lovely.

✓ I would say it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others. For example, when I celebrate Valentine's Day, my boyfriend always likes to give me chocolate because he says chocolate is related to sweetness and love.

gift前应加冠词a，句子结构不完整，like应为likes，he's saying应为he says，relative to sweet表达错误，应为related to sweetness and love。