巧克力— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
考生
I like eating chocolate but it's too sweet for me, especially white chocolate, and I'm on a diet right now so I prefer eating dark dark chocolate with 70 or more percent of real chocolate. But actually I like white chocolate so much.
考官
How often do you eat chocolate?
考生
I would like to eat chocolate every day, but I limit myself and I eaten just once or twice a week. So that's really good result for me because in the past I might eat chocolate every day or twice so the week.
考官
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
考生
Not really. My parents were limiting me in eating sweets and uh, actually I'm thankful for them, uh, because now I don't eat uh, as many sweets as my friends eat, but sometimes I really want to eat some milk chocolate.
考官
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
考生
I think it's one of the most common sweets in our life and you can add chocolate to every sweet you want. For example, you can eat the ice cream with chocolate or some cakes and cheesecakes with chocolate, eggless with chocolate, and it's really sweet and it tastes good.
考官
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
考生
I enjoy eating white chocolate with yogurt but also sometimes I eat it with coconut or banana. But actually I prefer classic milk white or black chocolate.
考官
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
考生
I think it depends on which chocolate you give. So for example, if you just give a bar of chocolate, it's not so good as a gift. But if you have bought, uh, chocolate candies with some filling and uh, it tastes uh, really good and interesting, why not?
評估
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文法
× I limit myself and I eaten just once or twice a week.
✓ I limit myself and I have eaten just once or twice a week.
The verb 'eaten' is the past participle and requires an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense. The correct form is 'have eaten' to indicate an action that happened at an unspecified time before now.
× So that's really good result for me because in the past I might eat chocolate every day or twice so the week.
✓ So that's really good result for me because in the past I might have eaten chocolate every day or twice a week.
The modal verb 'might' followed by a past action requires the perfect infinitive form 'have eaten' to indicate possibility in the past. Also, 'twice so the week' is incorrect; it should be 'twice a week'.
× My parents were limiting me in eating sweets and uh, actually I'm thankful for them, uh, because now I don't eat uh, as many sweets as my friends eat, but sometimes I really want to eat some milk chocolate.
✓ My parents were limiting me from eating sweets and, actually, I'm thankful to them because now I don't eat as many sweets as my friends do, but sometimes I really want to eat some milk chocolate.
The correct preposition after 'limiting me' is 'from' not 'in'. Also, 'thankful for' is better expressed as 'thankful to' when referring to people. Additionally, 'as my friends eat' should be 'as my friends do' to avoid repetition of the verb.
× I think it's one of the most common sweets in our life and you can add chocolate to every sweet you want.
✓ I think it's one of the most common sweets in our lives and you can add chocolate to any sweet you want.
The phrase 'in our life' should be pluralized to 'in our lives' to refer generally to people's lives. Also, 'every sweet you want' is better expressed as 'any sweet you want' to indicate any choice.
× For example, you can eat the ice cream with chocolate or some cakes and cheesecakes with chocolate, eggless with chocolate, and it's really sweet and it tastes good.
✓ For example, you can eat ice cream with chocolate or some cakes and cheesecakes with chocolate, even eggless ones with chocolate, and it's really sweet and tastes good.
The phrase 'the ice cream' is better as 'ice cream' in general. Also, 'eggless with chocolate' is unclear; adding 'even eggless ones with chocolate' clarifies the meaning. The phrase 'it tastes good' is sufficient without 'and' before it.
× I enjoy eating white chocolate with yogurt but also sometimes I eat it with coconut or banana.
✓ I enjoy eating white chocolate with yogurt, but sometimes I also eat it with coconut or banana.
The adverb 'also' is better placed after 'sometimes' for natural word order. A comma before 'but' improves sentence clarity.
× But actually I prefer classic milk white or black chocolate.
✓ But actually, I prefer classic milk, white, or dark chocolate.
The phrase 'classic milk white or black chocolate' is unclear. It is better to separate the types with commas and use 'dark' instead of 'black' for chocolate. Also, a comma after 'actually' improves readability.
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