巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat contradictory and unclear. You start by saying you like chocolate but then mention it increases your weight and is unhealthy, which suggests a negative view. Try to express your opinion clearly and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent.

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy, although I try to eat it in moderation since it's not very healthy.

建議: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Instead of saying 'I never eat chocolate before', say 'I have never eaten chocolate'. Also, try to answer the question directly and clearly.

範例: I have never eaten chocolate, so I don't have a frequency to share.

建議: Your answer is too long and contains grammatical errors. Try to use simpler sentences and be more direct. Also, avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: I didn't eat chocolate often as a kid because my family told me it was unhealthy.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to be more specific and concise.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and can make people feel happy. Many enjoy it as a delicious treat or drink.

建議: Your answer is hesitant and repetitive. Try to be confident and clear. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is strawberry because I enjoy the sweet and fruity taste it adds.

建議: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to explain why chocolate makes a good gift with specific reasons and avoid repeating the word 'gift' unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, chocolate is a great gift because many people enjoy it, and it shows thoughtfulness and care.

× I like to eat chocolate because chocolate is a very sweet food and it will increase my weight and also it's not a very healthy dessert and also not a healthy snack.

✓ I like to eat chocolate because chocolate is a very sweet food and it can increase my weight. Also, it's not a very healthy dessert or a healthy snack.

The use of 'will' implies certainty about increasing weight, but 'can' is more appropriate to express possibility. Also, the sentence was long and needed to be split for clarity, and 'and also' was redundant.

× I never eat chocolate before so I couldn't tell you this question.

✓ I have never eaten chocolate before, so I can't answer this question.

The present perfect tense 'have never eaten' is used to describe an experience up to now. 'Couldn't tell you this question' is incorrect; 'can't answer this question' is the correct expression.

× When I was a kid my family told me that chocolate is a unhealthy food so I'm I didn't eat the chocolate before so I couldn't say that I was often eating chocolate or not.

✓ When I was a kid, my family told me that chocolate is an unhealthy food, so I didn't eat chocolate before. Therefore, I can't say whether I often ate chocolate or not.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound like 'unhealthy'. 'The chocolate' is incorrect here; 'chocolate' without 'the' is appropriate. Also, the sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity.

× Chocolate is very popular in the world in the world because people really like the sweet and also chocolate sometimes make people feel happy and also this is a kind of a sweet food or a drink food and also this is delicious for some people.

✓ Chocolate is very popular around the world because people really like its sweetness. Also, chocolate sometimes makes people feel happy. It is a kind of sweet food or drink and is delicious to some people.

The sentence was repetitive and structurally incorrect. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'chocolate'. 'The sweet' should be 'its sweetness'. The sentence was broken into clearer parts.

× If you if you really want me to say what I will say strawberry chocolate because I really like strawberry flavours. So maybe I would like the strawberry favorite chocolate.

✓ If you really want me to say, I would say strawberry chocolate because I really like strawberry flavors. So maybe I would like strawberry-flavored chocolate.

The sentence had repetition and awkward phrasing. 'If you if you' is redundant. 'I will say' should be 'I would say' to express conditional. 'Strawberry favorite chocolate' is incorrect; 'strawberry-flavored chocolate' is correct.

× Yes, I think this is really good to think of chocolates as a good gift to others because chocolates can give us a gift.

✓ Yes, I think it is really good to give chocolates as gifts to others because chocolates make good presents.

The original sentence was awkward and unclear. 'Think of chocolates as a good gift' is better expressed as 'give chocolates as gifts'. 'Chocolates can give us a gift' is incorrect; chocolates themselves are gifts.