唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question without redundancy. For example, you can say, "Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions, but I rarely sing as I am not confident in my skills. However, I enjoy listening to music as it brings me comfort and peace."

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions, but I rarely sing as I am not confident in my skills. However, I enjoy listening to music as it brings me comfort and peace.

建議: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "Yes, I learned singing at school, but I haven't had the chance to continue since then. I also played instruments like the harmonium and tabla. In the future, if possible, I would definitely like to pursue singing further."

範例: Yes, I learned singing at school, but I haven't had the chance to continue since then. I also played instruments like the harmonium and tabla. In the future, if possible, I would definitely like to pursue singing further.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "I want to sing for my daughter because she plays the guitar. Singing together would make her happy and also strengthen our bond."

範例: I want to sing for my daughter because she plays the guitar. Singing together would make her happy and also strengthen our bond.

建議: Reduce filler words and complete your sentences clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, "Absolutely, I believe singing brings happiness to people's lives. For instance, when I feel anxious or tired, singing and listening to music help me release tension and feel better."

範例: Absolutely, I believe singing brings happiness to people's lives. For instance, when I feel anxious or tired, singing and listening to music help me release tension and feel better.

× Yes, I like singing, it helps me to express my emotions, but honestly I rarely sing because I'm very bad at it.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps me to express my emotions, but honestly, I rarely sing because I'm very bad at it.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with two independent clauses joined by a comma. It should be corrected by using 'because' to connect the clauses properly, or by separating into two sentences. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× However, I uh, really enjoyed umm, listening to music because it provides me uh, comfort, peace and.

✓ However, I really enjoy listening to music because it provides me comfort and peace.

The sentence uses past tense 'enjoyed' inconsistently with the present context and ends abruptly. Also, 'provides me comfort, peace and' is incomplete. Correcting tense to present and completing the list improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× A Yes, in the school I learned uh singing, but after that I never get a chance to umm learn singing in the school.

✓ Yes, at school I learned singing, but after that, I never got a chance to learn singing at school.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly ('learned' and 'never get'). The preposition 'in the school' is better as 'at school'. Correcting tense consistency and prepositions improves grammatical accuracy.

× I also played some instruments for uh, like uh, harmonium, uh, and tabula uh.

✓ I also played some instruments like the harmonium and tabla.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here. Also, 'tabula' is misspelled; the correct term is 'tabla'. Removing unnecessary prepositions and correcting spelling improves clarity and correctness.

× In future, if I get a chance, I will definitely pursue singing.

✓ In the future, if I get a chance, I will definitely pursue singing.

The phrase 'In future' should be 'In the future' to be grammatically correct. Adding the definite article 'the' is necessary here.

× I want to sing for my daughter. She plays guitar, so along with her, when she's playing guitar along with her, I want to sing.

✓ I want to sing for my daughter. She plays the guitar, so when she is playing the guitar, I want to sing along with her.

The sentence is repetitive and awkwardly structured. 'Along with her' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, 'plays guitar' should be 'plays the guitar' as musical instruments require the definite article. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Uh, it makes her happy and at the same time it strengthens our relationship and our bond.

✓ It makes her happy, and at the same time, it strengthens our relationship and bond.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding commas improves readability. 'Our bond' is sufficient without 'our' repeated. Minor punctuation corrections enhance clarity.

× I think singing, I believe that singing bring happiness, uh, in the lives of uh, people.

✓ I think singing, I believe that singing brings happiness in the lives of people.

The verb 'bring' does not agree with the singular subject 'singing'. It should be 'brings'. Correct subject-verb agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× For example, when I feel anxious and tired, uh, I am, I, uh, I sing and I also like to listen music, uh, it uh, releases my tensions and uh, provide me.

✓ For example, when I feel anxious and tired, I sing, and I also like to listen to music. It releases my tension and provides me comfort.

The phrase 'listen music' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to music'. Also, 'releases my tensions and provide me' is incomplete and lacks parallel structure. Correcting prepositions and verb forms improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.