唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is too long and a bit unclear. Try to give a direct response first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and make sure your sentences are grammatically correct. For example, mention your liking for singing, your favorite singer, and your goal clearly and separately.

範例: Yes, I like singing very much because it makes me happy. My favorite singer is from Argentina, and I also attend singing classes to improve my skills. I hope to become a professional singer one day.

建議: Your answer repeats information and has grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific about what you learn in your classes.

範例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing by attending singing classes daily. In these classes, I work hard to improve my singing skills and learn how to maintain rhythm and pitch.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and lengthy. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I usually sing for myself because I enjoy it a lot. Also, I want to create songs based on my real-life experiences, which makes singing more meaningful to me.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions. Moreover, if someone enjoys singing, it can lead to success and personal satisfaction.

× Yes, I like singing and my favorite singer is Argentina because my voice is very sweet according to me and I also attend my singing classes and I like to sing a lot and I want to make a singer also.

✓ Yes, I like singing and my favorite singer is from Argentina because my voice is very sweet according to me and I also attend my singing classes and I like to sing a lot and I want to become a singer also.

The phrase 'my favorite singer is Argentina' incorrectly uses a country name as a person. It should be 'my favorite singer is from Argentina' to indicate origin. Also, 'I want to make a singer' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I want to become a singer' to express the desire to be a singer.

× Yes, I already said that I attend singing class and that's why I do a lot of hard work to become a singer and that's why I improve my skills of singing and I daily attend my singing class and learn here how to sing and how to maintain a rhythms.

✓ Yes, I already said that I attend singing classes and that's why I do a lot of hard work to become a singer and that's why I improve my singing skills and I attend my singing classes daily and learn here how to sing and how to maintain rhythms.

The word 'class' should be plural 'classes' because it refers to multiple sessions. 'Skills of singing' is better expressed as 'singing skills'. 'Maintain a rhythms' is incorrect; 'rhythms' is plural and does not need 'a' before it. Also, 'I daily attend' is better as 'I attend daily' for natural adverb placement.

× Well, to be honest here I do not have any particular person or particular thing and what I sing for, but I think I sing for myself because I like singing a lot and I also want to make a song on my real life.

✓ Well, to be honest, I do not have any particular person or thing that I sing for, but I think I sing for myself because I like singing a lot and I also want to make a song about my real life.

The phrase 'what I sing for' is awkward; it should be 'that I sing for'. Also, 'make a song on my real life' should be 'make a song about my real life' because 'about' is the correct preposition to indicate the subject of the song.

× Yes of yes of course, because singing is a profession and if a person have happiness to sing and then the person get really success.

✓ Yes, of course, because singing is a profession and if a person has happiness to sing, then the person gets real success.

The verbs 'have' and 'get' do not agree with the singular subject 'a person'. They should be 'has' and 'gets' respectively to maintain subject-verb agreement. Also, 'really success' should be 'real success' as 'success' is a noun and 'real' is the correct adjective.