唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding unnecessary hesitation and redundancy. Also, directly answer the question first, then provide supporting details with clear linking words. For example, start with a clear statement about your interest in singing, then explain your preferences with specific reasons.

範例: I don't really enjoy singing because I lack confidence in my singing skills. Instead, I prefer activities like gardening and reading books, which I find more interesting and relaxing.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to give a more fluent and natural response. Also, directly answer the question first, then add a brief explanation if needed, using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: No, I have never had the chance to learn singing formally, so I consider myself quite inexperienced in this area.

建議: This answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear subject, and use linking words to explain your feelings or situations. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure for clarity.

範例: I usually sing for my family and friends when I feel happy or inspired. However, I don't sing very often because I am not confident in my singing ability.

建議: Your answer is relevant and includes an example, but try to reduce hesitation and improve fluency. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar words. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary related to emotions and benefits of singing.

範例: Definitely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, when someone is feeling stressed or depressed, singing can help reduce their anxiety and improve their mood.

× Actually, I'm not very passionate about singing because I don't have the courage to call best in this particular sector.

✓ Actually, I'm not very passionate about singing because I don't have the courage to call myself the best in this particular sector.

The phrase 'call best' is incorrect because 'best' is a superlative adjective that needs a determiner and a subject. The correct phrase is 'call myself the best' to indicate self-reference and proper use of the superlative.

× Instead, I prefer, uh, gardening as well as reading books, which I find quite more intriguing.

✓ Instead, I prefer gardening as well as reading books, which I find more intriguing.

The phrase 'quite more intriguing' is incorrect because 'quite' and 'more' should not be used together in this context. Use either 'quite intriguing' or 'more intriguing'. Here, 'more intriguing' is appropriate.

× Uh, actually not, uh, I have not earned this opportunity to learn how to sing.

✓ Uh, actually not, uh, I have not had the opportunity to learn how to sing.

The verb 'earned' is not appropriate here because 'earning an opportunity' is not a common collocation. The correct phrase is 'have not had the opportunity' to express the lack of chance to learn.

× Actually I sing for environment as well as any particular aspects and whenever I get an opportunity and I feel vivid at that time I try to sing but I'm unable.

✓ Actually, I sing for the environment as well as for any particular aspects, and whenever I get an opportunity and feel motivated, I try to sing but I'm unable.

The phrase 'sing for environment' needs the definite article 'the' before 'environment'. Also, 'sing for any particular aspects' requires the preposition 'for'. The word 'vivid' is incorrectly used; 'motivated' or 'inspired' fits better in this context.

× For example, whenever people face any difficulties, uh, they get, or they get, uh, depressed, uh, at the time, if they sing a song, they can reduce their stress and anxiety and depression.

✓ For example, whenever people face any difficulties and feel depressed, if they sing a song, they can reduce their stress, anxiety, and depression.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkward with 'they get, or they get, uh, depressed'. It is clearer to say 'face difficulties and feel depressed'. Also, listing 'stress, anxiety, and depression' with commas improves clarity.