唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency by avoiding filler words and correcting verb forms. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons. For example, say "I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax, although I'm not very good at it. I also love listening to songs."

範例: I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax, although I'm not very good at it. I also love listening to songs, which inspires me to improve.

建議: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "No, I have never had the opportunity to learn how to sing, so I am not skilled in this area."

範例: No, I have never had the opportunity to learn how to sing, so I am not skilled in this area.

建議: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, "Although I can't sing well, if I had to sing for someone, it would be my family or friends because I love them. Whenever I feel happy and inspired, I try to sing for them."

範例: Although I can't sing well, if I had to sing for someone, it would be my family or friends because I love them. Whenever I feel happy and inspired, I try to sing for them.

建議: Improve sentence fluency and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make the answer coherent. For example, "Definitely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, when people face problems or difficulties, singing can help reduce their stress and lift their mood."

範例: Definitely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, when people face problems or difficulties, singing can help reduce their stress and lift their mood.

× Uh, unfortunately I can't singing, but I fond of listening song.

✓ Uh, unfortunately I can't sing, but I am fond of listening to songs.

The modal verb 'can't' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'fond of' requires the preposition 'of' and the noun 'songs' should be plural. Additionally, 'listening song' is incorrect; it should be 'listening to songs'.

× Uh, unfortunately I can't singing, but I fond of listening song.

✓ Uh, unfortunately I can't sing, but I am fond of listening to songs.

The phrase 'fond of' requires the preposition 'of' followed by a noun or gerund. Also, 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object, so it should be 'listening to songs'.

× Uh, actually not. Uh, I never had this opportunity to learn how to sing and for this reason I am unable to in this particular sector.

✓ Uh, actually not. Uh, I have never had the opportunity to learn how to sing, and for this reason I am unable to in this particular area.

The present perfect tense 'have never had' is appropriate here to indicate an experience up to now. Also, 'sector' is better replaced with 'area' in this context.

× Actually I can't singing but if I had to sing for someone it would be my it would be for my family or friends because I love them.

✓ Actually, I can't sing, but if I had to sing for someone, it would be for my family or friends because I love them.

Again, after 'can't' the base form 'sing' should be used, not 'singing'. Also, the sentence was repetitive and needed punctuation for clarity.

× So whenever I feel vivid as well as inspired I try to sing for the time.

✓ So whenever I feel lively and inspired, I try to sing at that time.

The word 'vivid' is incorrectly used; 'lively' fits better to describe feelings. Also, 'for the time' is unclear; 'at that time' is more appropriate. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× For example, whenever when people get stuck in problem or face any difficulties, they get depressed.

✓ For example, whenever people get stuck in a problem or face any difficulties, they get depressed.

The phrase 'whenever when' is redundant; only one is needed. Also, 'in problem' should be 'in a problem' to be grammatically correct.

× If at that time they sing a song, they can reduce their stress and depression as well as.

✓ If at that time they sing a song, they can reduce their stress and depression as well.

The phrase 'as well as' is incomplete here and should be omitted or followed by another element. Ending the sentence with 'as well' is sufficient.