唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to use linking words to connect your thoughts smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions and share my feelings with others.

建議: Your answer provides good content but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct tenses and more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I grew up in a musical family where singing was common during celebrations and even on regular days.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Correct the phrase 'a way of expressions' to 'a way of expressing myself' and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I don't have a particular person in mind to sing for; instead, I usually sing for myself as a way of expressing my feelings.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and contains some grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid redundancy and use more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness because it cheers people up and creates a joyful atmosphere.

× I haven't really attended a formal training in singing.

✓ I haven't really attended formal training in singing.

The word 'training' is an uncountable noun here, so it should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Using 'a formal training' is incorrect because 'training' in this context does not have a plural form and does not require an article.

× However, I can say that going up I was surrounded by people who loves music and there were a lot of singing in my family during celebrations, even in the ordinary days.

✓ However, I can say that growing up I was surrounded by people who love music and there was a lot of singing in my family during celebrations, even on ordinary days.

The verb 'love' should agree with the plural subject 'people', so 'loves' is incorrect. Also, 'there were a lot of singing' is incorrect because 'singing' is uncountable; it should be 'there was a lot of singing'. Additionally, 'going up' is incorrect and should be 'growing up'. The preposition 'in the ordinary days' should be 'on ordinary days'.

× even in the ordinary days.

✓ even on ordinary days.

The correct preposition to use with days is 'on', not 'in'. Therefore, 'in the ordinary days' should be corrected to 'on ordinary days'.

× There's no special someone that I would like to sing for.

✓ There is no special someone whom I would like to sing for.

While 'There's' (there is) is acceptable in informal speech, for clarity and correctness, especially in writing, 'There is' is preferred. Also, 'that' is less appropriate when referring to a person; 'whom' is more correct as the object of the preposition 'for'.

× It's a way of expressions for me.

✓ It's a way of expression for me.

'Expressions' is plural, but here the phrase requires the singular noun 'expression' to correctly convey the idea of a method or means of expressing something.

× Most mostly singing cheers people up and they tend to add happiness in the environment.

✓ Mostly, singing cheers people up and tends to add happiness to the environment.

The phrase 'Most mostly' is redundant; 'Mostly' alone is sufficient. Also, 'singing' as a singular noun requires singular verb 'cheers' and 'tends'. The preposition 'in' should be 'to' when referring to adding happiness to an environment.