唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and concise by opening with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward word choice (e.g., “smooth my stress”) and grammar errors.

範例: Yes — I enjoy singing a lot. I started taking lessons in elementary school, and since then singing has helped me relax and lift my mood, especially after a stressful day.

建議: Begin with a direct answer, then describe one concrete detail (what you learned) and one effect or feeling, using linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because”). Fix word choice (use “fun” or “enjoyable” instead of “funny”) and grammar (“learned” and “pronounce correctly”).

範例: Yes, I learned basic singing techniques in elementary school. For example, my teacher taught us how to breathe properly and pronounce words correctly, which I enjoyed because practicing with classmates made lessons more fun.

建議: Answer directly and clearly name the people (e.g., family or friends). Use one supporting reason with a clear example and correct vocabulary (avoid unclear phrase “favorite singer season” and use “singer” or name). Keep it concise and natural.

範例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because music helps comfort people. For example, my favorite singer often moves me with emotional songs, and I hope my singing could make my loved ones feel similarly comforted.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Replace vague phrasing (“forget about the things”) with more precise language and use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it reduces stress and improves mood. For example, after singing a few songs I often feel calmer and more positive, which helps me cope with difficult situations.

× I felt singing really delightful and it would smooth my stress.

✓ I found singing really delightful and it would relieve my stress.

The verb 'feel' followed by a noun phrase is awkward here; 'find' is used to express opinion. Also 'smooth my stress' is incorrect collocation; use 'relieve my stress'. The sentence uses appropriate tense so change improves idiomatic use.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing in elementary school.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing in elementary school.

Using present perfect ('have learned') with a finished time in the past ('in elementary school') is incorrect in standard English. Use simple past ('learned') for actions completed at a specific past time.

× The teacher told us how to pronounce in the right way and I think the experience is very funny because we have a lot of peers to learn the singing method.

✓ The teacher showed us how to pronounce words correctly and I think the experience was very fun because we had many peers to learn the singing techniques with.

'Pronounce in the right way' is unnatural; use 'pronounce words correctly'. 'Very funny' usually means humorous; use 'very fun' for enjoyable experiences. 'Have a lot of peers to learn the singing method' needs rephrasing: use 'had many peers' (past tense) and 'to learn the singing techniques with' for correct preposition and noun choice.

× I want to sing for the ones that I really cared about.

✓ I want to sing for the people I really care about.

'Ones' is vague; 'people' is more natural. Tense mismatch: 'cared' is past tense while context suggests present feeling; use present 'care'. Also 'that' is less natural than no relative pronoun or 'who' for people.

× I think singing would really heal people's heart.

✓ I think singing would really heal people's hearts.

When referring to a plural possessive ('people's'), the noun should be plural: 'hearts'. This is an article/number agreement issue causing incorrect singular use with plural possessive.

× Just like my favorite singer season.

✓ Just like when I listen to my favorite singer,

The original fragment 'Just like my favorite singer season' is ungrammatical and unclear. It lacks a main verb and logical structure. The corrected version provides a clause that connects to the next sentence.

× Whenever I listen to her songs, I feel really warm hearted.

✓ Whenever I listen to her songs, I feel really warm-hearted.

'Warm hearted' should be hyphenated as the compound adjective 'warm-hearted'. The present tense 'listen' and 'feel' are correct; just fix compound adjective spelling.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring joy to people because singing will release the stress and it will make you forget about the things that are hard in your life.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring joy to people because singing can relieve stress and can help you forget the hard things in your life.

Mixing 'can' and 'will' is inconsistent. 'Release the stress' is an odd collocation; 'relieve stress' is natural. Using 'can' consistently expresses general possibility. Also simplify 'forget about the things that are hard' to 'forget the hard things'.