唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words for coherence. Reduce hesitant language and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'attractive vocal' → 'an attractive voice'). Add one specific example of when singing uplifts you.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially alone, because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, after a stressful day at work I like to sing for ten minutes to calm down and breathe more deeply, which also boosts my confidence.

建議: Answer directly then give a concise reason with one specific detail. Remove filler words ('uh', 'basically') and avoid repeating the same idea. Correct grammar (e.g., 'have learnt' → 'have learned' or 'learned how to sing'; 'vocals' → 'voice').

範例: No, I have never had formal singing lessons because I wasn't very interested as a child. I only sang occasionally when I was stressed, for example I would hum a lullaby to calm myself before exams.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and a short example. Avoid awkward phrasing ('write down every hard work') and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make the answer logical.

範例: I would like to sing for my mother because she has sacrificed a lot for our family. For instance, she worked long hours to support my education, so I would sing a heartfelt song at her birthday to show my appreciation and cheer her up.

建議: Give a direct answer, then support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Remove hesitations and make tense consistent (e.g., 'whenever she got angry'). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to structure the response.

範例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it helps them express emotions and connect with others. For example, my father often sang to my mother to cheer her up when she was upset, and it usually made her feel loved and calmer.

× Well, I do not have attractive vocal but I enjoy singing alone because it helps to uplift my mood and I can relax being myself.

✓ Well, I do not have an attractive voice, but I enjoy singing alone because it helps lift my mood and allows me to relax and be myself.

Use of 'vocal' as a noun is incorrect; 'voice' is appropriate. Missing article 'an' before 'attractive voice'. 'Uplift my mood' is better as 'lift my mood' and 'I can relax being myself' is unidiomatic; use 'allows me to relax and be myself'. Use of commas improves clarity.

× Uh, no. Basically, I was not very fond of singing and I was not very eager to learn how to sing.

✓ Uh, no. Basically, I was not very fond of singing and I was not very eager to learn how to sing.

This sentence is already correct for past tense and needs no change; it properly uses past simple 'was' to describe past preferences.

× I used to sing a song when I was stressed or my mood was not that good.

✓ I used to sing when I was stressed or in a low mood.

'Used to' correctly marks a past habit. 'Sing a song' is redundant; 'sing' suffices. 'My mood was not that good' is wordy; use 'in a low mood' for concision and naturalness.

× I think I do not have any attractive vocals, so I was not very keen to learn how to sing in my childhood or.

✓ I think I did not have an attractive voice, so I was not very keen to learn how to sing during my childhood.

'Vocals' (plural) is not natural here; 'voice' (singular) is correct. Tense should be consistent: use past 'did not have'. Remove trailing 'or' and use 'during my childhood' for clarity.

× Her dedication and hard work has made me the person who I am and I want to write down every hard work she has done in a single song so that I can dedicate her and make her feel more important and uplift her mood.

✓ Her dedication and hard work have made me the person I am, and I want to put all her efforts into a single song so I can honor her, make her feel valued, and lift her mood.

Compound subject 'Her dedication and hard work' requires plural verb 'have' not 'has'. 'Write down every hard work she has done' is awkward; 'put all her efforts into a single song' is clearer. 'Dedicate her' is incorrect; use 'honor her'. Use parallel verbs 'make her feel valued, and lift her mood'.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring considerable happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring considerable happiness to people.

This sentence is correct: present belief about a general truth uses present tense 'believe' and modal 'can' appropriately.

× Uh, I think people can express their feelings or emotion in a single song or lyrics dedicating them.

✓ Uh, I think people can express their feelings or emotions in a single song or lyric dedicated to someone.

Use plural 'feelings or emotions'. 'Song or lyrics' is inconsistent; choose 'song or lyric' or just 'song'. 'Dedicating them' is awkward; use 'dedicated to someone' to show intention.

× For instance, my father used to sing a song for my mother whenever she gets angry and he used to make her feel more important in his life.

✓ For instance, my father used to sing to my mother whenever she got angry, and he would make her feel important in his life.

When describing past habitual actions, use past tense consistently: 'used to' and 'got' (not 'gets'). 'Sing a song for' can be simplified to 'sing to'. 'Used to make her feel more important in his life' is fine but 'would make her feel important' is a natural phrasing.