唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid filler phrases like "I don't know why actually" and repeat words. Also correct tense and preposition: say "I've liked singing since I was a child" or "I liked singing as a child."

範例: Yes, I've loved singing since I was a child. For example, I often sing foreign pop songs in my room, because their melodies and lyrics make me feel relaxed.

建議: Give a direct answer first (Yes/No) and then briefly describe a specific memory or experience using linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like "I took. My father's phone." Use past tense correctly.

範例: Yes, I tried to learn a little once. For instance, I practiced by recording myself on my father's phone during a train trip, and then I listened back to improve my pitch.

建議: Answer directly and expand with a reason and possible future intention using a linking word. Avoid hesitation fillers like "Umm" and include one supporting detail to make the response more natural.

範例: I don't usually sing for others because I'm self-conscious about my voice. However, I might sing for close friends in private if I become more confident.

建議: Start with a clear general statement, then give a balanced explanation with linking words and specific examples. Use correct grammar (e.g., "varies," "an upbeat song," "it can't"). Avoid repetition.

範例: I think it depends on the song. For example, an upbeat pop song can lift people's mood at a party, whereas a sad ballad might make listeners feel reflective rather than happy.

× Yeah, I like singing since I was a child and I don't know why actually, but I love foreign songs and I love singing these songs.

✓ I have liked singing since I was a child and I don't know why actually, but I love foreign songs and I love singing them.

The phrase 'since I was a child' requires the present perfect tense to describe an action that began in the past and continues now, so 'I have liked' is correct instead of 'I like'. Also 'singing these songs' is repetitive; using the pronoun 'them' is more natural. Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'since' to show continuity (I have liked). Replace repetitive noun phrases with pronouns when context is clear (singing them).

× I don't remember a lot, but I remember I was with my parents in a train and I took. My father's phone and.

✓ I don't remember much, but I remember I was with my parents on a train and I took my father's phone.

The original has awkward fragments and incorrect preposition. Use 'much' with 'don't remember' rather than 'a lot'. Use the correct preposition 'on a train' for being inside a train. Combine the fragmented clause 'I took. My father's phone and.' into a single coherent clause 'I took my father's phone.' Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; keep clauses together and use appropriate prepositions ('on a train').

× Umm, I don't like my voice much, so no one actually.

✓ Umm, I don't like my voice much, so I wouldn't sing for anyone, actually.

The original reply 'so no one actually' is incomplete as an answer to 'Who do you want to sing for?' It needs a verb phrase. Adding 'I wouldn't sing for anyone' supplies the appropriate subject and verb. This fixes sentence structure and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Provide a full clause as an answer, including subject and verb, rather than a fragment.

× It's various from song to song. So if it's song, uh, an energetic song, yeah, it's bring happiness to people, but it's a upset song. No, it can't, can't bring happiness to people.

✓ It varies from song to song. So if it's an energetic song, yeah, it brings happiness to people, but if it's an upsetting song, no, it can't bring happiness to people.

Use simple present 'varies' to describe general truth instead of 'it's various'. 'If it's song, uh, an energetic song' should be 'if it's an energetic song'. 'It's bring' is incorrect subject-verb form; use 'it brings' (third person singular). 'A upset song' needs the adjective form 'upsetting' and the article 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an upsetting song'. Also remove duplicate 'can't'. Suggestion: Use correct verb conjugation for third person singular ('brings'), choose correct adjective forms ('upsetting'), and keep conditional clauses clear.